Trailblazer

I’ve shared this chapter a lot on here. But here it is again, in its close to final state.

CHAPTER I

It was a beautiful spring day in Burne. The clear sky and bright sun alluded to summer. Flowers bloomed their pretty faces amidst the grassy neighborhood yards, and the wind whispered to the trees. The world displayed no favoritism to the…[Read more]

AHHH Oh no, um… I may not be able to post a lot here. I might be taking another break from my novel… We’ll see idk… ugh.

*grumbles*

@ellette-giselle

To be honest, it doesn’t really matter either way. I was just surprised at that sentence in the book because I’d never thought of it that way before. You might throw other believers off too, or maybe I’m the only one… I don’t see it  as a big problem.

Yeah 😆 I should probably change it. It just looks so cozy in there. . . *meanw…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, it makes sense. It’s just interesting. If God sacrificed animals in place of Adam and Eve so they didn’t have to die, why wouldn’t the Bible just say that? All it says in Genesis is that he clothed them with skins.

@the_lost-journal

Sorry I dropped off the face of the earth for a day. It was super busy.

Okay, sounds cool! And yeah, kind of creepy too 😂 Carrot Cake sounds like a character. I like how you came up with the different races and how they become empowered when they fall.

@the_lost-journal

Really, lol. Hmm… I feel like other people do, too, but I’m not sure because I haven’t read too many people’s writing. But you’re right, most of us don’t for the most part.

Also, random question. What made you choose the name Kefa? (You don’t have to answer if you don’t want to.)

@ellette-giselle

Don’t worry, Julian is having all the same questions as you most likely are.

I can tell 😂

Interesting. I didn’t know animals were killed in Adam and Eve’s place, even though I knew about sacrifices later. Where is it referenced as the first sacrifice?

@theshadow

Yayy!! It sounds interesting—a little creepy, perhaps, but I’m intrigued!

@ellette-giselle

I’m so sorry I didn’t get back to you yesterday! It was such a chaotic day and I didn’t get home until 8 pm.

I really like the way you handled their conversion through the journal entries! It was cool. Leon was a gladiator?? 😅

God slew two animals in [Adam’s and Eve’s] place.

Um, when was this?

@keilah-h

I mean I understand they have to have some water in order to live, but didn’t you say somewhere else that Azers don’t like water? Or did I completely misunderstand and that’s just a Ottoline/Naami thing?

So I’m not completely sure about that XDXD

Mainly, they just are very possessive of their lands and don’t want trespassers XD especia…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Girl you should legit be an editor hahahaha you’ve always been sooooo good with critiques!!!

Thank you so muchhhhh

@savannah_grace2009

Why Eloy thoughhhh he kinda just drops off the face of the earth and isn’t relevant to the plot *cries* so you won’t be able to see him very much after a while hahaha

NoOoOo! 🥺 Too bad!! Idk he’s just funny to me lol.

I KNOWWWWWWWW

AHHHH that’s the most accurate thing anyone’s ever said about her hahaha

Lolol

@Esther-c

I’m already committed to reading two other people’s WIPs, but I don’t care I’m still subscribing to this topic!!! One day I’ll get around to getting everything read *sigh* 🤣

Lol! 😂 Yay! 😄

@elishavet-pidyon

You might be an author if you randomly eavesdrop on strangers so you can get story ideas.

I lowkey love eavesdropping and people watching, but it’s hard to make it inconspicuous. 🤣

@grcr

I’m already committed to reading two other people’s WIPs, but I don’t care I’m still subscribing to this topic!!! One day I’ll get around to getting everything read *sigh* 🤣

@freed_and_redeemed

Love the aesthetics!!!

I like the different style you did on these ones!

Ugghhhhhh

there ain’t gonna be no way for me to finish writing my story in time 😭

@savannah_grace2009

AHHH YESSSS MARKY BOYYYY ( @esther-c your nickname stuck lol, no going back now!!! hahaha)

This makes me so happy 🤭🤣

Oh my word, reading through everyone’s comments…. aghhhh!!! I need to seriously start reading it, I’ve just been so busyyy 😭

@freed_and_redeemed

AHHH GIRL I LOVE FANTASY <333333 it’s my favoriteeee I’m so excited!

@ellette-giselle

Nice! Did you study/read about instances where Christians first talked to unbelievers like your scene above?