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– What did/do you enjoy about your favorite MG novels?
Characters and plot. One of my favorite MG’s is Sew Zoey and I enjoyed the characters a lot, as well as sewing being a big factor for each book. The Flashback Four and The Genius Files were also quite good with the plot, though they’re more action focused.
– What do you think the MG category needs more of?
Involved parents. With Flashback Four and Genius Files, while they were good, I did not appreciate the parents at all. They did not believe their kids whatsoever and it was really frustrating. It would be nice to have a whole family where everyone loved each other despite their differences or annoying aspects of family members.
– What do you think it needs less of?
As others mentioned, the romantic aspect. These kids are still growing up, and while some do have crushes and that sort of thing, a lot of others don’t. It could also use less broken families.
– If you have any plot or character ideas that you won’t use, I’d love to hear them!!
Hmm, I’ll have to get back to you on that. None come to mind rn.
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I am so so so sorry for not getting back to you sooner!!
That’s alright!
Oooh, I really like this one! This is totally a book I would read!
Thank you, that’s very encouraging!
Then start building the plot points around that, because internal conflicts drives the story and external conflict carries it along. Think of ways that situations around your character can play into their character development, either showing a truth or sinking your character deeper into the lie they’ve been believing.
Good advice, thanks!
I wish I could have given you better ideas than that, but I normally start with characters rather than plot, so that’s just my auto response, if you know what i mean. 😛
Lol, I get it.
I’ll be using these to come up with some more ideas and get back to you on them, if you’re willing to read them and give feedback. I understand if your not able too though, and thanks again for the advice!
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Thanks! I might switch over to Reedsey though, considering Ellette’s post now.
Oh goodness, thanks for telling me. That’s really scary, I knew Google wasn’t great but that seems much too far.
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(yep I’m leaning fully into it now)
Oh boy XD
What have I done lol“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”
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As of right now, I have re-done parts of The Woods of Rosen which are now integral to where the story is headed (this is because I realized they would work better for the story and characters). So, I’m thinking instead of posting the chapters of the books on KP, that instead I’ll put a link to a google doc and put the chapters there for critiques. This is just mainly because, taking these new additions into account, it would be confusing for you guys to read the next parts without the context of the additions to the pre-posted chapters. If you guys are willing to, could you re-read the first two or three chapters once I post the link because I’ve added new stuff to them? You don’t have to if you don’t want to or have time to, it’s really only to add context to events in the future chapters.
Whoops. That was a long ramble, wasn’t it?
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look what you’ve done you’ve encouraged my obsession lollllllll
Wait, nooo!! I take it back, is it too late?! lol
Also it’s a-okay, I think this topic is kind dead anyway XD
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Hard to follow the rule of staying on the path when the path itself won’t cooperate.
Yep lol.
Nice!
You guys really like the slap part huh? XD
Looks good! Waiting for the next part.
Thanks!
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Praying for both, hope you get the job Ducktator!
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Stuff mostly about the medieval ages, or about sword fighting. For instance, feudalism and the exchange between peasants and lords, or the training of knights from pages to knighthood. However, at one point I was researching Irish slang for a story idea, and discovered some interesting slang such as “not looking the full shilling,” which means someone or something is crazy. I also found out how to spot a dead tree and that centipedes can be beneficial to homes since they eat bad bugs and also can regrow limbs.
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Poor Hallie, hopefully her siblings don’t embarrass her (right?). Nice job, the chapters are good. One thing I did notice though is that in a couple of sentences you explain why a character is doing something, like “to ___” and I think you could leave that out sometimes for the reader to figure out why they’re doing something for themselves.
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Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrifying shock, use the dots if you want it to be a slow realization that settles into horror.
Ah, okay that works better. Thanks!
I have been swamped lately, but we’ll see if I can have her to you this week.
Take your time! Thanks for the comments, I’m glad the chapter gave some sort of reaction.
Thank you! As for why Adaline and Olivia don’t really seem to care, you’ll find out why later on. Dylan… uh, yeah, Dylan actually does care about his family, so I’ll make a note to include that more.
@everyone
From this point on where the story really picks up, please, please rip into these chapters. Be as brutal as possible, if something doesn’t make sense or is contrived or bothering you, please comment that. Thanks again for reading this.
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