TheShadow

@theshadow

so, besides that, how was the chapter?

@trailblazer

Also, here’s the part you were jumping ahead on Trailblazer. Great minds think alike in the writing world I guess. lol.

@theshadow Note: Flavia is under developed as we discussed, and I plan on adding more about her in chapter 7

 
Chapter 8
Julius leaned his shoulder against the side of the window. He stared out into the garden below, thinking of all the days he and Marcus had spent there. They had grown up together, and had been friends from the day they met. The…[Read more]

@theshadow

Ack, I thought you would say that. I’ve been thinking also of a way to develop a bit more with her. I’m kinda distracted with the other stuff going on and thought I would drop it for now and come back. after all, this is my very rough draft. But yes, she is under developed.

@trailblazer

And lastly, this is just an idea that popped…

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@ellette-giselle

I agree with @theshadow, I would love to see more of how Marcus and Flavia’s relationship develops rather than just being told that it did. I also feel like I don’t know Flavia very well- I know you describe her when Marcus is thinking about her and talking to Caius, but I want to see it in her rather than just be told it about…[Read more]

@rae

I’ll be praying!!! Man, you are in serious trouble…. try some chocolate.

@theshadow

Yes, please send them on the WIP!!! I can’t wait!! I’m so glad you liked it!

@theshadow

no edits or critiques for that one?

@theshadow

You have no idea how happy that makes me to know that someone is looking forward to reading more of the story!!!

@theshadow

Well, now he’s happy. I mean VERY happy. You’ll see why……..

I’m posting the chapter right now.

@theshadow

yup. editing is going well, but I had to stop and go back to writing because Marcus was sad that he was being ignored. lol.

@theshadow

Oh I’m so glad you like it!!!!! No it didn’t come off as rude, I just thought maybe there was a reason, like you had critiques you needed time to think through or something. I also pulled off a little because…. I don’t know, I guess I didn’t want anyone to feel like I was monopolizing their time. I have been told I have a gift for…[Read more]

@theshadow

Yes, should I not?

I went back and did a bunch of the edits y’all suggested and then I’m working on the next chapter. I want the book to be on the shorter side this time, but i’m trying to not rush things.

@theshadow

Welcome! Great to have you join!

Yeah, I also have to stop between 15 and 15:30 cuz we’re taking a family friend somewhere.

So, hopefully I can actually do 12 hours. I will sincerely try.

@highscribeodaetherium @grcr @theshadow I posted it ^^^

@theshadow

Thank you so much!!! haha, I’m glad you liked that. Most times I write funny things and then wait in anticipation for the reader rto laugh. They look at me and are like “what? what am I supposed to laugh about?”

More body language. That goes to the notes on the side. Thanks. Ah, more conflicting emotions. got…[Read more]

For once I actually drew something I’m not greatly ashamed to show…

@freed_and_redeemed @grcr @trailblazer @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @theshadow

This is a picture of Tomoko from that short story I shared with you. Sorry about the poor quality, our scanner likes to give everything a greenish or yellowish…[Read more]

@rae

Aww, really?!?! But girl, your writing’s AMAZING!!!

Thanks though!!! <3

@theshadow

Hi! I don’t think we’ve met before…

I’m Sara, a chocolate consuming, emotionally unstable, sleep deprived, algebra loving, public school attending sophomore (in highschool)! (I mean technically I’m a sophomore since school’s out for the summer so I’m…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

@theshadow

Great guys!!! I can’t wait to see what you give me to draw! I’ll do multiple characters for each of you, you’ll just have to send them one at a time. Whoever sends one first gets it drawn first. lol.

@keilah-h @theducktator @theshadow @rae

Heyyyy, I’m back for real this time!

I’mma try to write an RP sometime soon, I’ll prob have Anwyn and Everi go with Sniper’s crew in the forest, and Zyrin and Nazyra… I’ll figure it out as I go 😂

@theshadow

I really hate to do this again, but “wondered” was used twice again when Marcus was speaking to Ignatius.

No way!! I did not do that twice in a row! So sorry! haha! I normally catch that when I read back through it. thanks for pointing it out.

Oh, I’m glad the thing about Ignatius makes sense! No worries about not remembering!

@theshadow

I’m glad I’m not the only one who struggles with first chapters.

Oh dear, yeah, I had better use some body language. thanks for catching that. I’ll go back and hit some of those scenes!!!

Your right, if Ignatius was a normal guard. but, Ignatius is a Prætorian. As I mentioned in the first chapter, they are the elite soldiers, and in…[Read more]