TheShadow

Also, @whalekeeper , I know I’ve asked this a few times already, sorry, but how can I figure out who my character’s roommates are?

@peeps

Ok, here’s my lil alien dudes

Eddie: female, about 14 in human years ish, 3’ tall, green eyes, long brown hair in a French braid, tan skin with some green coloring, long unicorn-like tail, wears a white tank top and dark pants

Ellie: Eddie’s identical twin sister, chin length brown hair, wears a sky blue hoodie

Eddie

Eddie was dying…[Read more]

@loopylin

Sorry about the paragraphs, I have gone through and shortened them after people mentioned it. it should be easier to follow now.

Um…really whatever strikes you as needs changing. I often get comments from my friends like “It’s good.” “I really like it.” et cetera et cetera. Honestly, I get tired of hearing that, so if you got some…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo I love this one and the other character ones you’ve posted! Your story seems really cool.

I should start making mood boards again…

@freedomwriter76

NO! *grabs Riker and Leon* don’t take ma bois from me!!!! I shall give them blankets and coco myself, thank you very much! XD

lol you better 😆

this new 😀 emoji is creeping me out just a lil bit…XD

hehe yeah sometimes my friends use that emoji when they’re trying to be threatening

@freedomwriter76

Those all look so cool!

why are all my charries so saddddd 😭

Well, I don’t know. Do I need to steal them from you so they can have a break and give them each a blanket and cup of hot coco? XD

@rae

Also what kind of things do you most want criticism on? Grammar? Style? Story structure?

I can also just read it and tell you the things I like about it. : )

@rae

Hello!

I’m sorry I didn’t see you tagging me for a while. I finally started reading your story and I’m enjoying it so far, but I’m only halfway through chapter two. I have a really hard time reading the italics and long paragraphs, but I’m not giving up! I’ll give you a longer response later when I finish it.

Thanks for tagging me. Sorry I…[Read more]

@rae @hybridlore @mineralizedwritings @esther-c

I’ve been working on this chapter this morning…and it feels a little clunky to me. Do you guys have any input that you think would make it run smoother?

Chapter 14

The air was pleasantly cold, nipping the tip of Sef’s nose as she walked in step with Lilitu. The sound of leaves crunching b…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Do you have any moodboards?

@janellebelovedpig

Never mind I just checked and I wrote 586 words…NOT a thousand… (same thing, right? XD)

@janellebelovedpig

That’s great that you finished it!

I wrote about a thousand words during mine.

@hybridlore

Sequel. It’s called The Two Emperors

So there’s Guardian Angels, then Sovereignty in the Galaxy: The Troublemakers, then Sovereignty in the Galaxy: The Two Emperors, then The Returns, then Alpha Slit, and that’s as far as I’ve got with sci-fi.

@janellebelovedpig

Hey!

I’ll join, starting at :10, ending at :40 with you.

I have a hard time with getting distracted, but I’ll try my best to stay on task, lol!

@thearcaneaxiom

yeah, if you don’t get to it that’s totally fine!

@rae

“All right, all right already. I’ve got a headache and I’m seeing kinda double and I feel weird in that I’m concerned on winning a war and you’re concerned about what I should be concerned about.”

“Well this is worrying.” …

Haha that’s funny

Yeah, sorry, it’s kinda long.

@esther-c @savannah_grace2009 Thanks.

@anyone

ATTEMPTNG JR., TELL ME WAHT YOU THINK>>>

 

The door of Krogen’s base burst open at my command. I basically fell down the stairs out of excitement. Maybe I did, since I remember banging both knees. It wouldn’t be the first time that’s happened. When I was younger and less alert, Krogen had tripped…

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@hybridlore @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @jonas @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

@mineralizedwritings if you have time

“A little child dashed in without a knock and practically shouted, ‘I heard you got a new sword with a dragon head on it!’ His eyes reminded me of a dragon and I found it amusing that this child did not seem to mind…

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@mineralizedwritings

I totally get it.