TheShadow

@ALLISON
YOU’RE BACK YOU’RE BACK YOU’RE BACK

I DID NOT SEE THAT COMING OH MY GOODNESS WORDS CANNOT DESCRIBE HOW HAPPY I AM RIGHT NOW

well I think I’m done with writing (for now, but who knows?)

Awww sad day :/ that’s okay though! You do whatever you feel is best for you, and what God is calling you too! I have missed you so much 💗💗💗💗💗💗 and I w…[Read more]

@grcr @esther-c @freed_and_redeemed @thearcaneaxiom @whalekeeper @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @acancello (I’m still going to tag you until you come back) @anyone-else

See above post ⬆⬆⬆

Okay…I’m going to make a new topic for my WIP because this one has 22 pages…and over half of them is SUPER CRINGY writing that I posted back in September/October! (My September/October writing was perhaps the worst I have ever written in my entire life….my Robin Hood Rip-Off that I wrote at 8 was better than…[Read more]

A board I made for my WIP:

@keilah-h @theducktator @theshadow @rae

Heyyyy, I’m back for real this time!

I’mma try to write an RP sometime soon, I’ll prob have Anwyn and Everi go with Sniper’s crew in the forest, and Zyrin and Nazyra… I’ll figure it out as I go 😂

@mineralizedwritings

Of course 😊

And thanks 💗💗

@mineralizedwritings

Aww I’m sorry…That’s so sad you feel you have to hide.

I’m not trying to say that I know exactly how you feel, but I do understand the feeling of not being able to show anyone who you truly are, and feeling awkward in social situations.

I literally overthink everything, and I’m positive I have social anxiety because I…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

oooh yesss!!! Sorry, idk why I didn’t see this sooner xD

1. Summarize your project in a paragraph or two! Like on the back of a book.

(Everyone just ignore the fact that I still don’t really know what to call this novel)

The Pythonos have stolen Sef’s mother and sister, leaving her to live with Iver, an abusive drunk that n…

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@freed_and_redeemed

I feel attacked😂

As you should.

Jk lol

@ellette-giselle

I know you’re probably busy…but would you like to help me and give me some tips on some of my writing as well?? We could be critique partners, if you’re up for that!

@trailblazer

Girl your suggestions were good, though! I haven’t done much research on starting off a book, so it sounds like you have more tools under your belt in that area than I do.

Thank you! That’s good, I guess…xD

@ellette-giselle

I still think you should keep the fountain scene! I loved that! Just maybe put it after the Colosseum? M…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

I can’t wait. We could write a book together and make everyone else hate us because we leave them in tears all the time. lol.

@theshadow

I really hate to do this again, but “wondered” was used twice again when Marcus was speaking to Ignatius.

No way!! I did not do that twice in a row! So sorry! haha! I normally catch that when I read back through it. thanks for pointing it out.

Oh, I’m glad the thing about Ignatius makes sense! No worries about not remembering!

@theshadow

I’m glad I’m not the only one who struggles with first chapters.

Oh dear, yeah, I had better use some body language. thanks for catching that. I’ll go back and hit some of those scenes!!!

Your right, if Ignatius was a normal guard. but, Ignatius is a Prætorian. As I mentioned in the first chapter, they are the elite soldiers, and in…[Read more]

@theshadow

Haha, no, I cannot stand repeated words! It’s like nails on the chalkboard!

Alrighty then, I’ll swap that scene around.

How is the second chapter? Better then the first? I always find my first chapter the roughest.

Ok y’all, here’s chapter two!!

 
Chapter 2
 

“Marcus. Marcus, can you hear me?”

Marcus slowly looked up. “What?”

“Marcus, what is wrong with you?” asked Julius. His tone was playful, but his green eyes held a hint of worry.

Marcus sighed and rubbed a hand over his face. “I don’t know. I’m fine. I guess I was just thinking.”

“Abou…[Read more]

@grcr

No problem. Someone else mentioned it seemed out of place, and maybe use a part of it later.

Glad it was funny though!

Ok, in just a sec I’ll send chapter two. Let me skim it real quick to make sure there aren’t any horrid errors that are clearly visible. lol.

@grcr

So keep the fountain sword scene or not? Now I’m confused. lol.

@savannah_grace2009

No your suggestions are amazing! They are just what I have been looking for!

@trailblazer

Lol! XD

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, sorry if I went a little overboard on the critiques lol

I know I’m not the best at giving advice…sorry

@savannah_grace2009

Ok then. No worries. I’ll split it up. Right now this is just ideas. I mean, you guys are seeing this stuff literal the minute after a type the last word of the chapter. One I get farther into it I’ll have a more concrete setup.