TheShadow

@ellette-giselle

I think the last one is my fave!

Also, I read the blurb that you have and I like it! I usually prefer non-dialogue blurbs myself, but that one is still fine I think, but I would be happy to help regardless! All I’d really need I think is a basic rundown of the plot and what you want your readers to immediately grasp from the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Do you have any other thoughts on the chapters you’ve read?

I found a dumb song that made me giggle called I Am Steve by Hey Steve

Been listening to it on repeat XD

Chapter 12

A Law

The sight that greeted Lilitu was like a cold slap in the face.

In front of the church stood three Pythonos, each with a dark horse by their side.

Jraldath, Selena, and Rrath.

A chill went down Lilitu’s spine. Unfortunately, the trio’s reputation preceded them—and it was covered with the blood of innocent victims.

The bells…[Read more]

@theducktator

Why do you always have the BEST memes?!?! Those are great XD

@whalekeeper

Girlll for a second I was scared you were gonna talk about my story and I was scared XD

yeah that’s hard.

I would just encourage her to talk to her parents about it. Maybe just gently talk to her about your concerns? She might (and will probably) get defensive, but still it’s worth a shot if you care about her that much.

I’m not…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah I’ll think about doing something like that.

Again, sorry if that scene made you uncomfortable (or anyone else!)! <3

And thanks for reading my stuff!

@rae

Aww that scene was sooo cute! <3

@whalekeeper

I feel like the blindness bit was too much? I mean for Chase to give up his sight as well as his mobility. It’s too on-the-nose for Chase’s character, since he often gets marked with physical things like scars, stuttering, and the mobility thing. I felt less sorry for him, and more “oh okay that happened.”Idk, it felt like waaaaay…

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@freed_and_redeemed @savannah_grace2009 I have a Chase scene for you

@whalekeeper @loopylin @grcr @theducktator @esther-c @kielah-h @theshadow @ellette-giselle @anyone

I have a really sweet but sad Chase scene. For context, this is after Chase’s last battle with Narsa Jeptune.

oh, and beware, I’ve barely edited this. Criticism welcome 🙂

Chase…

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@theducktator

6 or 7

@keilah-h

No no no! You didn’t offend me! I just felt bad for posting it XD

And you’re good I wasn’t upset or offended at all…I just you know, felt bad, and I’m sorry if that scene made you uncomfortable :/

I’m just saying that if I had picked up your fully written, published book and read it through, I might’ve felt a little iffy about the…

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@loopylin

AWESOME!! Thank you so much!

Could you Dominic?

He is 16 years old, slender, lighter skin tone, has black hair and dark eyes. He’s a guy ballet dancer. (I’ll attach a picture of the kind of outfit he’d wear.) He can be really funny and chipper, but also really quiet and serious. Depending on the situation. He is trying to escape from…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

hmm I was taking a break, but I have nothing to do for the next three hours so you can give me a description if you want

@whalekeeper

Looks like it might be seven!

Anyone else?

@highscribeofaetherium

Nice, that’s two votes for 7.

@loopylin

Howdy Loopy,

Are you still drawing characters, or are you taking a break?

@esther-c

Thanks! The feedback is super helpful!