TheShadow

@keilah-h @rae

Sniper switched to a gun and aimed into the forest. “Silvanis, how large is this creature, and is there more than one?”

“About the size of a rat from the planet Dary. Only one.” Silvanis answered. Dary? Haven’t heard of that place before.

“About this high and this wide.” Fairy showed the size with her hands. “Oh this’ll be a goo…[Read more]

@rae

That sounds good XD

Trevor

“Trevor’s right. There’s nothing better than getting into a fight.” Silvanis agreed, then was promptly elbowed by Fairy. “Finally, someone else agrees.” Trevor said. I’m beginning to like this Silvanis guy. “You two are going to get each other killed, I just know it.” Azalea sighed.

@ellette-giselle

First chapter was good, though I’m a bit confused. Does this take place in the real world, or in a fictional world? Also how old is Aaron?

@ellette-giselle

Thanks!! It was fun, just very, very tiring XD

@princesachronicle22

Chase scene sounds great.

@rae @keilah-h

 Trevor

As the group proceeded into the forest, Trevor thought he heard something rustling in the leaves, then a twig snapping. “Did anyone else hear that?” Everi, one of the men in the group, asked. We’re being followed. Trevor thought, and a smile crept over his face. “I hear…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Sorry I haven’t been getting back to you! I was at a lake house for a few days with friends. But now I’m back, so I’ll probably read over the first chapter this morning and tell you my thoughts. Sorry again!

@keilah-h

Lol yeah

Trevor

“Since most of ya didn’t look like you wanted to go lookin’ for beetle grubs, we’ll be huntin’ mammal prey. Do all of ya know ‘ow to do that?” Sniper asked as he led Trevor and the group through the forest.

“Fairy doesn’t, but I can teach her.” Silvanis answered, and Trevor watched his face turn red. He tried his b…[Read more]

@keilah-h @theducktator @rae @princesachronicle22

If it’s okay, I’m going to write an RP.

Trevor

“Good idea. Hey, Huntress, ya coming with us?” Sniper said. “I think I’ll stay here.” Huntress replied.

“Fine with me.” Sniper gestured for Trevor, Azalea, and the others that were going with him to follow.

“Ready to find out what’s going on her…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you! Yeah, after the help I got with this, I feel like I could try anything on here and I would have help no matter where I got stuck, because so many of Y’all are on here!

Yeah, everyone on here is really helpful.

OK, there you go. That would be the end. Let me know if you like it better then the first one.

I loved it!!! T…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

what is your opinion?

I do like the ambiguity of the ending, I just wanted to make sure Julius chose right lol.

I hope that’s a good thing……..

It is good thing, it shows that your book has an impact on the reader.

Btw, thanks for sticking it out and getting to the end with me! Knowing that you were reading it really encou…

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@ellette-giselle

THATS THE ENDING?! Nononono it can’t be the ending right?! Julius chose to die right?! Okay that got me, that hit really hard oh my goodness. Wow.

“He shielded his wife with his own body. That lion is still trying to tare him off of her. I don’t she’s even been touched, but that beast is furious.”

Awww 🥺

Ignatius stepped a…

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@ellette-giselle

You’re welcome! I’m excited for the next chapter.

@ellette-giselle

Man… that hit hard. Really hard. I may or may not have almost started crying at the end there. Great job, I noticed you put in more descriptions of the colosseum, and that really helped to imagine the inside of the colosseum. The atmosphere was good as well, and everything was great!!

@ellette-giselle

I have to brush my sister’s hair, and then I should just about have this next chapter ready for you!

Okay, can’t wait!!

@ellette-giselle

Do you think Julius is going to believe?

Hmm, I’m not sure. The way he’s acting, trying only to preserve himself, it doesn’t seem like he will. Or maybe when he’s see Marcus and Flavia die (if they do) then he’ll come to faith. Sigh, it’s another game of will-he-won’t-he XD

@ellette-giselle

I LOVE IT!!!! Thank you so much, it’s so good! I like it in black and white, and also I haven’t figured out his surcoat yet lol. Thanks again, I really appreciate it!!

@ellette-giselle

Chapter 13 and 14 are really smooth, the scenes were good and atmospheric. The only thing I noticed which isn’t even a big issue is that you used Caesar’s name instead of Nero’s in chapter 13 at some point. It was great though!! Once again, Julius’ inner conflict was portrayed well.

@keilah-h

thanks! I’m glad you were willing to listen to my randomness

You’re welcome, and anytime!

@ellette-giselle

Sorry it took a sec!

That’s okay!

“Julius, what a surprise,” Ignatius said in a low voice. “I see that you were a traitor all along.”

I KNEW IT! I KNEW YOU COULDNT BE TRUSTED IGNATIUS!!!

Chapter 11 and 12 were great, although it seems to me like more than two months had passed since Julius and Marcus last saw each other. Ma…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Keep an eye out, I’m about to post the next chapter.

Yesss!!