Miriam K.

*emerges from the dust and shadows*

Has the dance even happened yet?

Actually, I think there was a point in the drafting or planning stage that lowkey forgot Brandon existed 💀🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@theducktator

Awww, thank you so much girl!!! 💖 I appreciate you taking the time to read through it all! <33

Do you have any additional feedback after having read the whole thing?

@savannah_grace2009

No that’s really helpful! Tysm!!

@linus-smallprint

Oooh that’s a good idea!!

And I like your ideas too…I feel like that would be really cool if we did something like that

Now that I’m going back to the beginning…

This is really hard XD

because I know you’re trying to go for the “chaos” vibes of a big family as they get ready for church and the party. You set up Hallie, Easton, and the parents pretty well, especially for the fast-paced scene, but the other siblings kind of disappear throughout the book.

Maybe…[Read more]

@esther-c

To be honest, I’m not really sure.

I might have to reread it a little more and let you know XD

@savannah_grace2009

Ok thank you!!

I was thinking there needed to be more family interaction too. I’m glad you caught that. Is there a certain spot on the book that you think those types of scenes would fit best? (If not, that’s fine)

Ok yes!! I will for sure do that! It will be fun for me to take time to flesh out the characters individually…[Read more]

@esther-c

I would just like to see it set up a little more at the very beginning chapters.

I know you’re going for chaos on the Sunday morning before church, but like I mentioned before, since Easton and Hallie’s family is a big one, I think you need to focus more on their family and the dynamics. I’d love to see Hallie’s closeness with her mom…[Read more]

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Thank you girls so much for reading through my book and supporting me!! 💕💕 I so so so appreciate you! ❤️

Your comments have given me a lot more confidence in the plot and characters, which I definitely needed going into a third draft.

Are there any scenes you’d like to see added? Or characters you’d like to see mor…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! you’re the best and I always love exchanging ideas with you <3

I LOVE LITTLE HALLIE

@esther-c

yeah, Cars and Phones BROKE ME

Last week my mom was at Mayo Clinic in Rochester doing more cancer treatments, which was hard since it wasn’t planned. I guess even if it was, it would be hard since she was gone for over a week and me and my siblings and my dad were all missing her a lot and attempting to keep our house from going out of…[Read more]

Also, apparently I haven’t shared the mock cover yet!! (At least in this forum) Here it is! (At the end of the story XD)

Also…

Look! I found little Hallie!! 🥰

@savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @grcr @smiley @keilah-h @theshadow

Ok guys… 👀 I know it’s a lot to read, but I’m dropping the last 6 chapters!! Enjoyyyy! And then give me alllll the feedback! I’m planning to finally start on the official third draft soon.

Chapter 27

Hallie rolled onto her back and let out a sigh, staring at the dark ceiling…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Girllll, you’re so sweetttt 🥹 Thank you so much!! Your comments mean so much and are one of the reasons I keep on going with this book bc I know there will other people out there who will like it just as much 😭🥰❤️

OMC GUYS GUYS GUYSSSSS
I FOUND A SONG FOR EASTON

It’s “Cars and Phones” by David Dunn

It almost made me cry but…

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Just in case… (also lmk if the doc isn’t working or you can’t edit/access it)

KP Connection Doc

actually I don’t have your email…for some reason I thought I did XD

Kathleen was the one who helped me publish my short story on the website…so that’s the only reason I have it

i can email it to you if you want!