Stepheroni and Cheese

@hybridlore

You’re right – personality is soo a part of interpreting mental process. Even if it only covers the surface.

@grcr

That’s crazy! I just checked, and my KP birthday is August 10th… 2 years 🙃

@ellette-giselle

But Turin and Edwin died.

I’m just telling the story.

lol.

I knooow, I’m sorry for questioning the fabric of the story 😂😅 But I think we can all agree that these stories come from our minds, and sometimes we need to adjust our inventions. I’m not saying you have to change their deaths, I’m pointing out how I as the reader feel a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I do feel uncertain about killing off Edwin and Turin. I understand Edwin, but both guys? It feels like half the cast has died and there isn’t much left in terms of motivation for the reader.

Reading the earlier chapters, I expected Aaron and Turin to develop a friendship which would become a staple of the book until at least…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I definitely have difficulty writing guys. They seem like a completely different species and I struggle to get in their heads. Probably because my brothers and their friends are so weird.😂

These are guys I can remember at the moment. (Sorry if any people didn’t want to be tagged)

@calyhuge @thearcaneaxiom @folith-feolin @otherworldlyhistorian

Ellette would love some feedback on the scene above, It is about a male character in grief, and it’s mostly troubleshooting at this point.

Definitely an important topic. I think other people will benefit from this topic more than me because my approach to emotions is  mixed (if we’re talking male vs female mindsets) whenever I feel insecure in a given situation. Linus mentioned on another topic that he views emotions as problems to solve, and that resounds with me. I am still more…[Read more]

Like I don’t just feel the emotions by themselves, I deal with them analytically.

@ellette-giselle

I know about maybe ten guys on here, and one of them knows me irl. So don’t worry, it isn’t just Linus and Jonas 😂

@ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint

*Comes back to an interesting conversation*

Okay, I actually have input for this.

Linus:

I hear when girls are upset, you want to just simply talk about it and how you feel. When I rant about my problems, I am not looking for someone to sympathize with me (even if I think I am). I am looking for a solution.…

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@freed_and_redeemed

CONGRATULATIONS ON BROKEN SHACKLES!!!!!!🥳🥳🥳🥳 And sorry about the braces. Those are miserable.

@stephie

My interlibrary loan arrived today! I’m in!

I think pictures stopped working again.

@ellette-giselle

Thanks for the thoughts! I’ll definitely try to work that in.

Yw!

AHHH!!! I forgot to tag people on this new section! I was wondering why no one said anything!!! I’ll just re-post this whole thing.

You’re alright, I still get notifs by email even when people don’t tag me. I read it 👍

@ellette-giselle

yes!! Fire away!! I’m ready for it now! I think I’m prepared for people to criticize Aaron.

Okay!! So this isn’t a critique of Aaron himself, like ‘ohyouhavetochangehim.’ It’s for you to improve his arc.

Aaron begins to verbally doubt God during the siege. But his very first act was trusting God to lead him into a dangerous kin…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oh no! I’ll be praying for you. Is there any specific way I can be doing that?

I’m doing okay lol, thanks for the offer! I caught the dreaded senioritis in my junior year and I just don’t want to return to school. I’ve had symptoms of depression since a year ago and… Blegh… I don’t know what to do about it.

On the bright s…[Read more]

@rae

I would encourage you to play around with it and see what you like. This is a first or second draft, so I wouldn’t worry too much about the POVs being in the right place.

But yeah, I really like what Calyhuge suggested. Sometimes you just have to write and figure it out as well. Definitely write from both POVs in this part of the draft, t…[Read more]

Some completely positive notes <3

1. Your writing output is still so prolific, that’s great!! Most writers slow down towards the middle of a story, including myself.

2. I enjoy the king character. He seems like a straightforward, honorable guy who might be a tad prideful but still attempting to be a leader. He shouldn’t die. Nor should Sabina.…[Read more]