Brianne

@theshadow

It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

@freed_and_redeemed

Love it!!

Also was not expecting Erich! I need to know how he joined the American army!!!

Or if we can’t do Slack find another free platform where we can have separate channels/forums to keep everything organized

I’m half-tempted just to create our own Slack community at this point. Since (i think) we all trust each other. And then only people we know can get in (no more stalkers XP).

Because if KP was just abandoned, then we’ve got our own little writing community that will live on

Idk 🤷🏻‍♀️ Just an idea…

@ellette-giselle

Ohhhhh nooooooo! Ellette! I’m so sorry! That’s terrible!

I’m glad LOS was okay… but I’m really sorry about your WIP. That’s terrible.

I use Word Online (microsoft365.com, I think…) to write, and it saves online so I can access it through my phone and other devices. That might be worth looking into for the future, since I’m pre…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed Love it!!

Chase is glowstick

@theducktator @whalekeeper

Thank you for the advice!

@loopylin

interest/curiosity

@savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @grcr @smiley @keilah-h @theshadow @trailblazer

A lot of this is actually first draft material since I was adding in stuff, so bear with me 🫣 But I didn’t want to keep y’all waiting. 😉

Chapter 10

“We’re not picking them up, right?” Easton watched Hallie through the rear view mirror.

“No, they’ll mee…[Read more]

@theshadow

Ooh, okay that’s a good idea. I’ll try that, do you have any book suggestions?

Yes! Let’s see…

• Anything by Robin Jones Gunn — she’s literally my favorite author ever and I absolutely love her writing. I’ve heard mixed opinions on her books (some saying they’re cheesy or unrealistic) but it think they’re really good. If you don’t like…

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@ellette-giselle

Wait… what? What happened to the parts you couldn’t recover?

@loopylin

Chase

Chase watched Felicity open the can, his eyes slowly turning purple as the soda came pouring out the top.

“So, yeah. You just flip up the tab. Like I did, except more… carefully.”

Chase made eye contact with her, his eyes a purple the shade of a violets’ petals. He nodded, less shyly than he previously had, more sure of himse…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed ^^

@freedomwriter76 Great scene! *sniffles* 💔😭

@the_lost-journal That’s exciting! Hopefully it works!

@the_lost-journal

Sorry for taking so LONNNGGGG to reply!

Well now we’re even because I took FOREVER to reply as well!! 🤣 So sorry!!! 😭

Oh, yeah I should’ve mentioned that! About how mega churches are almost always portrayed badly. (Ofc there are some awful mega churches.) But what I mean about “giving them a good church experience” is truly b…

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@savannah_grace2009

Yes, of course girl!! <333

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks!! <33

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in ou…

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@freed_and_redeemed

Wyoh apparently doesn’t like to notify me when you tag me 😑 Anywayyyy Loved the scene! But also feel so bad for Riker!! 😥

@the_lost-journal

Oh cool! Awesome!!