Brianne

@thearcaneaxiom

Oh, sorry, it is chapter 6!

Well, two years have passed, and Sef has been abused, so that changes her personality a little bit. They both get older and more mature. What do you mean by different, like personality?

@trailblazer @acancello @freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @mineralizedwritings

Amir

Amir quickly hopped up out of the pile of shoes, bouncing on one foot for a moment as he regained his balance. He pasted on a goofy grin. “I’m fine,” he said with a chortle.

Thankfully, nobody really cared or payed attention to him for very long. But i…[Read more]

@anyone

More questions worth discussing:

How do we know that we interpret Scriptures correctly, when there’s so many different interpretations found? (This is different from a discussion of translation)

How do we discuss dilemmas that seem unique to our era and have no (seemingly) direct reference to what we see in scripture?

Anything else?

@everyone

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@jonas

That sounds good, what you developed so far seems like a good base to start for him.

Yeah, it’s interesting to have those kind of quirks in a magic system, like the nats in Mistborn.

Divine/magic influence is always the simplest way to go. Many point out that saying “a wizard did it!” is bad, and in a certain context this is true, but…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I like the new character you introduced in chapter 4. I don’t think you shared a chapter 7 yet, but I started chapter 6, but it seemed like there was some kind of gap, where the characters are somewhere different without explanation. Is that intentional?

@jonas

I like Vilsayor, have you developed his character much in terms of things like motives and such, or is he just plain bad?

I like that you fixed the magic system to implement more even structure. That sort of thing would have driven me nuts. Though it does make me ask the question of what makes these sorts of interactions fundamental in…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

I’m putting more thought into the 4th chapter. Then I’m going to make it so Lilitu gets 2 chapters. What do you think of the revisal?

Chapter 4: A theif

“Git your grubby fingers off that bread!” Lilitu froze. He looked longingly at the loaf of bread which might as well have been a bar of gold, before turning to face the e…[Read more]

@jonas

Wow, how are you so good at creating magic systems? i’m so jealous, lol

@jonas

I like the idea of the table with the powers intersecting!

@acancello

“A masquerade party?” Amir said, completely bewildered. “Why?”

“Maybe they’re torturing us,” Hugo joked, “what could be worse than dressing up and dancing with girls?” He laughed, seeming to have made a full recovery.

Girl I legit started laughing!!!

“That’s strange,” Amir commented from the floor, “these clothes, this rack here.…

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@whalekeeper

They’re going great, and I’ve been getting so much great feedback on my story? How about you?

@acancello

I followed you and I can see your pins! I actually have two accounts, one I use most of the time, but I think @euodia-vision said that one was private, so you could try my other one if you want.

https://pin.it/67wMvFR

@keilah-h

(The fact that you kept yourself committed to a whole long chapter book is better than I can do, tbh.)

Ikr!!! XD

@keilah-h @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter @everyone

Hey guys! How are you all doing?

@fernweh_grace

Yeah, once again though, this is the era of self publishing, so stories from indie writers from all over the planet are getting better and better access to the market, allowing a deep saturation of ideas, themes, and stories of all sorts of cultures, including African varieties. While I don’t know of many examples of African…[Read more]

@grcr Okay, wellllll… I have this, but it’s a little lame and short…

Adeline

“How do you do?” Adeline greeted a young woman with glistening black hair. “I’m Adeline Thurman.”

“Nice to meet you. I’m Isabelle Jefferson,” the young woman replied. “Have you known the Baumanns before?”

“Father had some acquaintance with Mr. Baumann, but I’ve…[Read more]

@grcr go right ahead

@esther-c @acancello @freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @mineralizedwritings

Kari

“Are you okay, Amir?” Kari asked, looking at the shattered armor and the boy sprawled in the midst of it. She wanted to laugh, but poor Amir looked so embarrassed that she bit her tongue.

“Yeah, I’m fine,” he muttered, picking himself up. “I hope that…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @grcr

Yeah we need to get some talking happening lol. I’m just not having any inspiration on how to start conversations.