Brianne

@ellette-giselle

Oh, that.

I didn’t see it coming, but I should have. 😂

@ellette-giselle

I do remember Julian talking to Ernst about his father, if that’s what you’re talking about. Nice to get a glimpse into his state of mind before… well…

@ellette-giselle

Oh no. 😭 Poor Rolf.

I really liked this section… even though it was sad. You did a good job with the action and tying in Lieutenant Roth’s story to the main plot.

Nice to see I won’t be alone 🙂

@dekreel

Thx.

The backstory behind it is pretty crazy.

@whalekeeper @liberty

I hesitate because I reeeaaallllyy need to get back into writing/editing. But… that week is leading up to my brother’s graduation and I’m in the homestretch for my schoolwork and life has just been busy and I need time to just chill. Anyway… I also really really want to sign up for CEW still…. 😭 I am just being indecisiv…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

That’s good that they’ll be more distinguishable— but I hope that doesn’t mean they’ll drift apart.

Yeah xD It would be interesting. It was a sweet scene though.

@ellette-giselle

I liked the transition right at the scene break before Liesl and Roland got married. And how you showed Leon’s state of mind after the fever and how Julian didn’t understand it.

@ellette-giselle

No, I was just on my phone already and I saw the notification pop up.

Not really… no suggestions really stood out. 🤷‍♀️

@ellette-giselle

Aww. Good section. I’m so glad Leon didn’t die.

Guys…I haven’t signed up for CEW yet….. 🫣

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, but if there’s a lot of plants, chances are there’s a lot of animals surviving off of that, which means the wolves shouldn’t be having much trouble finding food.

You could just take out this sentence:

The wolves growled, but they were hungry, and they decided the threat was worth the potential kill. The winter had been…

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@whalekeeper

Ok sounds good!

I would, but I’m focusing on writing and not editing for these next few months.

@loopylin

Also I just had an idea. What if, as Chase got closer to certain people, he started associating them in his mind with different animals depending on their personality? Could be a way he gets more comfortable around some people. Just an idea though. You can use if you want or not.

That is an awesome idea! And it sounds just like something…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I’m game 🙂

@whalekeeper

That sounds like fun! I’m not exactly sure how busy I’ll be this summer, but I’d love to join in. The next few weeks are going to be kind of crazy though.

@ellette-giselle

Oh no!!! Not Leon!!

Good section. One thing I noticed was that you mentioned that the people were able to find a lot of food during the winter… then you said that it had been hard on everyone, especially the wolves. I get that they eat meat and not plants, but it was kind of confusing.

otherwise, good job! 😬

@loopylin

Sorry that I haven’t been active. I wasn’t sure what to rp, and there was alot of life stuff I was working with.

Chase

Chase shook his head. “Wha-what t-teach-er g-gives t-tree l-less-ons?” Besides, if you want to climb trees, you can talk to squirrels about it. They can tell you all kind of things about the different kind of trees…[Read more]