Brianne

THEOLOGY/MESSAGE

~ Any theological concerns for the story?

I don’t think so.

~ What would you say my world view was?

Christian? XD. (Again, I don’t really know what kind of answer you want here.)

~ What would you say was the message of the story?

God will give us strength when we are weak and help us have the courage to stand up for Him.

~Were…

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STORYLINE

~ Was the plot solid and engaging?

~ Did the pacing feel consistent throughout the book? If not, where did it lag or feel dull?

I feel like these two kind of go together. The pacing, I felt, was not very consistent. Sometimes we would be skipping over weeks or months, sometimes we would get slow, slice-of-life scenes, and sometimes we…[Read more]

I have a question

I started writing this short story, but before I continue, I’d like to know if it’s interesting.

No title yet

Also, sorry that it’s a little rough

When I was a child I loved to read books. Any moment I had to myself I would crack open a book, squeeze into a tiny but comfy corner and read. I would discover lost worlds, travel…

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@ellette-giselle

I’m flexible, so whenever everyone else is ready to read the next book is fine with me. And is it about Leon and Julian?

K, here’s the characters section.
CHARACTERS

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Joseph, because he’s the main. 🤪 But no, really, we got to see all his inner…[Read more]

I WAS LITERALLY ON THE ILLUSTRATION QUESTION 😣

@ellette-giselle

I was so, so close to finishing your questions, and then a bee came over by me, and I picked up my laptop and ran away (lol.)

But then I accidentally hit the screen somehow and I CLOSED THE LINK!!!

Augggghhhh. I cannot believe that just happened. Now I have to write them all out AGAIN. So this might take a while.

@ellette-giselle

BUT WHAT HAPPENED! HOW COULD YOU LEAVE US ON A CLIFFHANGER LIKE THAT? CRUEL!!!

i can’t reveal everything! I have to save some surprises for when I post the full story!

As any of my poor charries will testify, I am very much cruel.

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle

Here’s your Baron scene. I’m sorry that it’s so rough.

After they had eaten, Andy took him outside, showing him about the barn, instructing him on basic duties, and telling him about the animals.

As Andy was talking about the cows, a brown horse with a white blaze trotted over to the paddock fence and whinnied. Andy…

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@ellette-giselle

AHHH ELLETTE YOU SAVED THEM!!!

AND IT’S DONE!! CONGRATULATIONS!! (I know this is a later draft, but still xD)

Biggest thing I noticed, is that, in the end where Joseph and Amelia are talking, some of the things that they say, “I’m so glad that… etc.” seemed a little bit like info-dumping. It’s good for us to have all that in…[Read more]

@theducktator

Sorry, didn’t get tagged! 😒

That does sound like fun! We always stay up till midnight too—last night we had a bunch of neighbor kids over, so we watched some YouTube videos and then played some games until midnight. I don’t think I’ve made any resolutions… but we’ll see, there’s still time.

Happy Almost New Year! What are you guys up to?

@keilah-h

Aww, your relationship with your brother sounds so sweet.

@elishavet-pidyon

Same—we played with our stuffed animals too. We had maybe thirty of them between us, and they all belonged to a “pack” with an alpha, and a beta, etc. (Me and my sister were Erin Hunter fans.) We acted out whole storylines—probably enough to fill a novel xD.

@ellette-giselle

Wow, that’s really cool. Definitely keep them in then.

@ellette-giselle

Wait, you wrote the hymns? I thought you had just pasted them in. 😳

(There’s a lot of hymns I’m not familiar with, since we don’t normally sing them at my church.)

@ellette-giselle

I finished! (And the art for the cover is really cool.) I gave answering those questions a shot, even though you might be past the point of feedback, I figured you might want to hear what I thought.

Were the characters believable?

For the most part, yes. At times, there was somewhat stilted (slightly forced seeming, or maybe a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

You can’t leave me hanging there!! 😖 Although, I’m wondering if I want to know what happens next.

No real changes to the scene that I could think of. The one hymn is pretty long, but if you want to include it all, that’s fine.

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle

SERIOUSLY?!

Lol, I guess I have to write now…. I’ll be back when i have something

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @highscribeofaetherium @grcr

thx

WHY HAVE YOU NOT BEEN POSTING YOUR ART!!!???

Because I’m gonna hate these drawings, and then they’ll be forever on here. Besides, they’re far from perfect.

@ellette-giselle

Oh my goodness! I want to read more and more and more! I want to see the part where Baron gets his scar!!

Thank you for tagging me!

You’re welcome.

I’m currently writing Baron’s story in the form of an anthology series. I’ll post it when I’m done

 

Oh, btw, you never hit anyone with snowballs!

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okay, I’m done