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@ellette-giselle

Good section!!!

Again, you’re summing up lots of time here, especially at the end. I would maybe like to be shown instead of told some of that, but it’s okay if you just really need to get to the next part.

Joseph felt that for once they were safe.

Then, something happened that changed everything.

Oh no… 😥

@ellette-giselle

Ahhhh, gotcha.

Sure!

@ellette-giselle

Aww!! 🥰

So, one question—why would Amelia inherit part of her uncle’s inn? Wouldn’t that usually go to her brothers?

Also, I like that we’re getting more conversations between Joseph and Amelia. However, I feel like they’re all based on future situations—mostly just “what if this happens?” Except for this one:
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@liberty

Alright!! 👍

@liberty Hey, you’ve got to write the next scene! 😆

@liberty X4 💨❄

@ellette-giselle

Looks good!

@ellette-giselle

I don’t think I ever really did that either . . . unless it was like, a cut on my finger. I’ve never really heard of people licking their knees 😶

@ellette-giselle

Lol, the last part. 😆

I think the scene felt a little awkward just because we haven’t seen much of Amelia and what she feels about Joseph, but I think you’re working on adding in more of that. Otherwise, good job.

@freed_and_redeemed I love that scene!!

@whalekeeper @loopylin I mean sure, you can team up, as long as it doesn’t get out of hand. *hides behind a tree*

@ellette-giselle

Aw, cute scene between Joseph and Julian! I noticed a few typos, but that’s not a big deal. Only other thing is, I noticed that in Sabina’s letter someone said that the orphans need Jesus. I don’t know why, I can’t remember too many references to Him, so that stood out to me since many fantasy books use a different name for Jes…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thanks again for the quotes! I didn’t want too many, so I put two more.

@esther-c The cover!!! 🤩🤩

@freed_and_redeemed Aw, Hans and Felix 😭

@elishavet-pidyon @koshka

Lol. Sometimes it’s hard to make connections, it took me a while to realize you guys were sisters too. Power is also your brother, right? Who is the oldest?

We’re not the only KeePers with twin siblings.

Wait—who ELSE? 😳

@koshka @elishavet-pidyon

That is so cool!! 😅 Lol. Oops. You guys weren’t very subtle, though, both commenting on that. XD

@ellette-giselle I agree with Linus on that too. Show some more Joseph and Amelia scenes!!

@ellette-giselle

Hah! @linus-smallprint and I called it!! 😆

So, good section. The end… I know you said there are going to be parts of the books where you include longer scripture passages. That’s fine, but this scene kind of feels almost exactly like Aaron’s did, when he was studying the Bible about a husband and wife. I think it’s too similar…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon @koshka

Wait… are y’all twins? I know you’re sisters. 🤨

@grcr Ooh, looks so pretty!!

@the_lost-journal B!