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@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy, but I also like Chromamancy, Prismathurgy, and Spectrathurgy. For some reason the sole “t” and “l” sounds bother me when placed in front of “urgy”.

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Wow, that was creepy. I guess I don’t like horror. But it was pretty well-written, I think. It was cool how you tied the ending into the beginning.

If you want feedback faster in the future, I would tag people, otherwise your post gets buried underneath all the other topics and we have to go scrolling for it. Although, if you e…[Read more]

@theducktator

Lolol! I would ask @jonas since he’s the leader of the Adventure one. I don’t know who’s in charge of the others… I’m sure @whalekeeper would know.

@esther-c

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Also, are you planning to add a name at the top?

@theducktator

Unfortunately, I don’t think so. Ellette is out of town for the next two weeks, and I have family visiting this week (and I’ll be on vacation next week.) I would imagine that we’ll pick it back up on one of the following Saturdays, unless @savannah_grace2009 or someone else is interested in leading them while we’re gone. I don’t k…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oh no, I’m sorry! I’ll be praying for y’all as you travel and try to get things worked out.

We’ll miss you! 😢

@ellette-giselle

We’ll have to see!

I love how you always say stuff like that like you have no idea what’s going to actually happen 😂

@the_lost-journal

Is it pronounced keh-fa or kay-fa?

@the_lost-journal

Oh, cool. I meant you didn’t have to answer if you didn’t want to because some people don’t share their names on here, and I didn’t know if it was your real name.

A lot of times people pick fake names or usernames on here for internet safety. Like Rae and Loopy. Obviously Hybridlore isn’t my real name xD

@the_lost-journal

Sometimes KP has weird glitches… the joke around here is that “Wyoh” the “ghost” eats our posts.

@ellette-giselle

Sounds good.

Yep. Like two days ago it was 80. In February. 😅 I mean, winter never lasts long here, but still. I’m not looking forward to the summer weather.

He seems like a character. I’m interested to know what he thinks of Leon and Julian and their faith.

@ellette-giselle

To be honest, it doesn’t really matter either way. I was just surprised at that sentence in the book because I’d never thought of it that way before. You might throw other believers off too, or maybe I’m the only one… I don’t see it  as a big problem.

Yeah 😆 I should probably change it. It just looks so cozy in there. . . *meanw…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, it makes sense. It’s just interesting. If God sacrificed animals in place of Adam and Eve so they didn’t have to die, why wouldn’t the Bible just say that? All it says in Genesis is that he clothed them with skins.

@the_lost-journal

Sorry I dropped off the face of the earth for a day. It was super busy.

Okay, sounds cool! And yeah, kind of creepy too 😂 Carrot Cake sounds like a character. I like how you came up with the different races and how they become empowered when they fall.

@the_lost-journal

Really, lol. Hmm… I feel like other people do, too, but I’m not sure because I haven’t read too many people’s writing. But you’re right, most of us don’t for the most part.

Also, random question. What made you choose the name Kefa? (You don’t have to answer if you don’t want to.)

@ellette-giselle

Don’t worry, Julian is having all the same questions as you most likely are.

I can tell 😂

Interesting. I didn’t know animals were killed in Adam and Eve’s place, even though I knew about sacrifices later. Where is it referenced as the first sacrifice?

@theshadow

Yayy!! It sounds interesting—a little creepy, perhaps, but I’m intrigued!