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@esther-c

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

Glad I was able to help!!!!!

I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]

@stephie

I feel like it totally depends on the situation.

Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

@grcr

Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…

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@savannah_grace2009

Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.

Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you…[Read more]

@liberty

The blurb looks great! Very intriguing.

@ellette-giselle

True, true 😂

And it has a lot to do with–––––

You’re just going to leave me hanging? XD

Ahh, gotcha.

@ellette-giselle

Great section!! I think you pulled it off. It doesn’t feel too odd or confusing. We are told when the time is passing by, and given a few details, and then the winter is over.

and the other down Julian’s back while he lay sleeping.

😂😂😂 Talk about a rude awakening!

I’m interested in Leon’s backstory more now. He seems to be hidi…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I’m sorry, that sounds really hard. You were able to find a doctor that seemed like she knew what she was doing, right? Have they been able to figure out different ways to help you?

Thanks. Unfortunately she didn’t feel qualified to take my case and sent me to the clinic where she learned and they messed up pretty bad. I improved a l…[Read more]

@liberty

Violin would be easier to learn coming from a pianist background! But yeah, I understand if you already have too many instruments.

I will say that it’s hardest in the beginning, probably. When you are just starting out, it’s hard to get it to sound good. But if you can stick with it for a few months, it gets better. 😉

@liberty

I do!

You don’t, do you?

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, it’s so weird because basically all they’re getting is the character’s personality and description in-book . . . also moodboards, which probably influenced it a lot xD But still, it’s cool seeing other people’s imaginations on paper.

@ellette-giselle

Right. Just make sure to give the readers some regular scenes too, so that there’s a blend between time jumps and regular speed. But you’ve already done this in the sections we’ve read, so just keep it up. 😜

@ellette-giselle

I imagine her with darker eyes and probably looking a little younger, but you did pretty well. 😁

@whalekeeper

I and my younger sister sometimes have telepathy moments too, so I think it’s more of a close sibling thing.

Hey, that happens to me and my younger sister as well! We’re almost 2 years apart, but spend a good amount of time together (as homeschoolers 😝). We’re always trying to say the same thing or making the same connections.

@linus-smallprint

Wow, your depiction of her personality was really cool to read. I hadn’t even thought about all those things together like that–like how she pauses to consider different things–but you have a good point.

Awesome, thank you!! I’m glad it doesn’t seem to be too much for you guys.

@whalekeeper

Oh yeeaah, I did. Okay, makes more sense that you knew. 🤣 Yep, I signed up! I think I’m in Brookside Stories?

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Oh, awesome!! I guess I’ll see you on there, then! 😉

I don’t think I can survive another week. 😳😝 And the teacher puts ME in the trouble chair.

The trouble chair?? XD

Godzilla origins are pretty cool. Having watched som…

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@ellette-giselle

Thank you so much!!!!

She’s not smiling because I was trying to capture the way she feels to me at this point in the story. Hope that’s okay.

That’s totally fine! I like seeing how other people picture my characters–I don’t know, it’s just really interesting and cool. And yeah, I don’t know if I would imagine her smiling eit…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I like the section, though again, like we’ve talked about before, you do kind of gloss over everything and summarize it all in a page or two. That’s fine, though, if this isn’t a super important part of the story. It would be nice to get to see some more specifically of the new characters who’ve joined Julian and Leon, since we…[Read more]

@liberty

Ahh, so exciting!! Great job!!!