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@esther-c

To be honest, I’m not really sure.

I might have to reread it a little more and let you know XD

@savannah_grace2009

Ok thank you!!

I was thinking there needed to be more family interaction too. I’m glad you caught that. Is there a certain spot on the book that you think those types of scenes would fit best? (If not, that’s fine)

Ok yes!! I will for sure do that! It will be fun for me to take time to flesh out the characters individually…[Read more]

@esther-c

I would just like to see it set up a little more at the very beginning chapters.

I know you’re going for chaos on the Sunday morning before church, but like I mentioned before, since Easton and Hallie’s family is a big one, I think you need to focus more on their family and the dynamics. I’d love to see Hallie’s closeness with her mom…[Read more]

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Thank you girls so much for reading through my book and supporting me!! 💕💕 I so so so appreciate you! ❤️

Your comments have given me a lot more confidence in the plot and characters, which I definitely needed going into a third draft.

Are there any scenes you’d like to see added? Or characters you’d like to see mor…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! you’re the best and I always love exchanging ideas with you <3

I LOVE LITTLE HALLIE

@esther-c

yeah, Cars and Phones BROKE ME

Last week my mom was at Mayo Clinic in Rochester doing more cancer treatments, which was hard since it wasn’t planned. I guess even if it was, it would be hard since she was gone for over a week and me and my siblings and my dad were all missing her a lot and attempting to keep our house from going out of…[Read more]

@theducktator

Awesome, thank you so much!!

@rae

I’m so glad it went well!!!! Happy Birthday, by the way!

Also, apparently I haven’t shared the mock cover yet!! (At least in this forum) Here it is! (At the end of the story XD)

Also…

Look! I found little Hallie!! 🥰

@savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @grcr @smiley @keilah-h @theshadow

Ok guys… 👀 I know it’s a lot to read, but I’m dropping the last 6 chapters!! Enjoyyyy! And then give me alllll the feedback! I’m planning to finally start on the official third draft soon.

Chapter 27

Hallie rolled onto her back and let out a sigh, staring at the dark ceiling…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Girllll, you’re so sweetttt 🥹 Thank you so much!! Your comments mean so much and are one of the reasons I keep on going with this book bc I know there will other people out there who will like it just as much 😭🥰❤️

OMC GUYS GUYS GUYSSSSS
I FOUND A SONG FOR EASTON

It’s “Cars and Phones” by David Dunn

It almost made me cry but…

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Just in case… (also lmk if the doc isn’t working or you can’t edit/access it)

KP Connection Doc

@ellette-giselle

The cover looks really cool! Who designed the image? Was that you?

I wanted to add that the description on the back looked good, but the last paragraph didn’t give us much hope, if that makes sense. Most of the time in descriptions like that you’ll see something that leaves the reader guessing whether or not something is goi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Huh, weird. I didn’t do that intentionally, but it might be because you don’t have an account anymore. 🤷

Thank you so much!!

@ellette-giselle

It looks awesome! Is that for the series covers, or an illustration, or what?

@ellette-giselle

So exciting!! 😅

@ellette-giselle

Good to have you back!

I’ll try to get to those questions later today. 😉 Sorry I haven’t yet.