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@ellette-giselle

AHHH ELLETTE YOU SAVED THEM!!!

AND IT’S DONE!! CONGRATULATIONS!! (I know this is a later draft, but still xD)

Biggest thing I noticed, is that, in the end where Joseph and Amelia are talking, some of the things that they say, “I’m so glad that… etc.” seemed a little bit like info-dumping. It’s good for us to have all that in…[Read more]

@theducktator

Sorry, didn’t get tagged! 😒

That does sound like fun! We always stay up till midnight too—last night we had a bunch of neighbor kids over, so we watched some YouTube videos and then played some games until midnight. I don’t think I’ve made any resolutions… but we’ll see, there’s still time.

Happy Almost New Year! What are you guys up to?

@keilah-h

Aww, your relationship with your brother sounds so sweet.

@elishavet-pidyon

Same—we played with our stuffed animals too. We had maybe thirty of them between us, and they all belonged to a “pack” with an alpha, and a beta, etc. (Me and my sister were Erin Hunter fans.) We acted out whole storylines—probably enough to fill a novel xD.

@ellette-giselle

Wow, that’s really cool. Definitely keep them in then.

@ellette-giselle

Wait, you wrote the hymns? I thought you had just pasted them in. 😳

(There’s a lot of hymns I’m not familiar with, since we don’t normally sing them at my church.)

@ellette-giselle

I finished! (And the art for the cover is really cool.) I gave answering those questions a shot, even though you might be past the point of feedback, I figured you might want to hear what I thought.

Were the characters believable?

For the most part, yes. At times, there was somewhat stilted (slightly forced seeming, or maybe a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

You can’t leave me hanging there!! 😖 Although, I’m wondering if I want to know what happens next.

No real changes to the scene that I could think of. The one hymn is pretty long, but if you want to include it all, that’s fine.

I didn’t really notice that the uncle’s betrayal felt forced, but I would have to go back and look at it again to see for sure. I was so preoccupied with Yeah, I knew that was gonna happen and Oh no—what’s gonna happen to them now? To really focus on it. Unless Linus feels otherwise, I think it was fine.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry this took me so long to respond—I didn’t get a notification, so I thought you hadn’t wrote back yet.

My first thought is that you would need to save Joseph, because it would be strange to kill off the main character three quarters (four fifths?) of the way through the book.

But looking past that, Joseph’s charact…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Of course!

Oh don’t apologize girl! I completely understand that. Aww yes!! 🥹 God truly does know what we need. You’ve helped me too😌 Thank you for being so sweet!

I’ll be praying for you and if you ever need to talk I’m here! 🤍

@ellette-giselle

Aww girl!! Yes!! I loved itt! Definitely tag me if you write anything else for it :))

Aw nooo don’t cry 🥺

@ellette-giselle

Yes girlie! I’ve loved reading what you’ve written for the snowballs🤭 And I loveed your blurb for The Crimson Rose!! It sounds so good!

Oh yes pleasee

@ellette-giselle

Oh ofc!

Yeaah 😅 Old habits die hard haha

@ellette-giselle

Thank you!! Yes it is😥 I randomly came up with it yesterday haha, I’m planning on writing a short story about it.

And thank you for tagging Freedom, I still use her old tag sometimes😅

@freed_and_redeemed Sorry girl!

@ellette-giselle

Eh, I wasn’t surprised.

@ellette-giselle

Joseph, Amelia, and Beric. I don’t know her brothers well enough yet.

I’ve let myself be deceived. My whole life I thought I’d never have the strength, and I was right. But it’s not about me at all! None of this is.” Joseph waved his hand to punctuate his words. “My whole life I’ve been worried about what I can and can’t do, but…

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Good scenes, though. Joseph was a tiny bit preachy when he had his character shift arc, but it worked since that’s been his struggle since the beginning.

I can’t wait to see what happens next. 🥺

@ellette-giselle

Ellette!!!!! 🥺🥺

What are you going to do to them??

Oof sorry I forgot about this!

Hope everyone had a very merry Christmas😌

The young lady padded softly into the room, slippers not making a sound as she clutched a tattered rose to her breast and a silent tear ran down her face. Crossing the room, she sat down on a stiff sofa and gently caressed the flower’s soft petals–velvety pinks and whi…[Read more]