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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks, 2 days ago
I don’t know how a four year old thinks hahaha
honestly I had really deep thoughts for a little kid and I have always thought really complex, so it seems realistic to me XDXD
I will work on it!!!
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks, 2 days ago
@anyone-who-is-interested
Chapter 1
Strong hands grabbed at her shoulders, trying to rip her away.
But Sef wouldn’t let go.
Eyes scrunched shut, tears leaking from the corners, she clung to her father like he was the only thing keeping her life together.
In a way, he was.
And now he was leaving.
“Let go, Sef,” her mother said stern…
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 weeks, 2 days ago
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 weeks, 3 days ago
Please pray for my family. Satan is trying to tear our family and my parents’ relationship apart. 😭🥺
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 2 weeks, 4 days ago
I don’t eat bananas either, but when I do they have to be a little after the bright all yellow… like beginning to soften (and barely turn brown, not too brown at all).
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-GRCR- posted an update 2 weeks, 6 days ago
The first day of the year in Extroit is in March, because the new year starts in spring.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic My Sister Published a Book in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 weeks, 6 days ago
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Sara replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks ago
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Sara replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks ago
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Sara replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 1 day ago
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Sara replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 1 day ago
That is so cool!!!! That sounds amazing!!!!!
Thank you so much <333
Yesssss! I ate too much food lol
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 weeks, 1 day ago
Oh okay!
That’s not the reason anymore I guess 😂 I actually forgot I said that…a lot has changed lol
That makes sense though, I understand what you’re saying!
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 weeks, 1 day ago
Oh, and as for why I changed the ending instead of them abandoning Lilitu…
There are a couple reasons why I did that. Maybe they’re not good reasons lol but I’m going to leave it, at least for now so I can play with it. I think it will make the story make a little bit more sense in the future so I’m just going to leave it for now.
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 weeks, 1 day ago
Thank youuu!
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 weeks, 1 day ago
@highscribe
I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.
Thank you so much!
I corrected the things you suggested and you’re right, I think it will flow a lot better! Thank you so much, you have been very helpful! <3
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 weeks, 1 day ago
I think I asked before why he insisted on this, and you said that it was to sweeten the deal for Kaden. Personally, I feel like you should show Kaden as having more hesitation if this is going to work. To me, it seems like they have already made up their minds to become Pythonos. Sure, they’re scared, but to me, it still doesn’t convey a s…
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 weeks, 1 day ago
Oh my goodness you guys are so good!!!!
I actually have noticed a couple of the things you’ve said before but for some reason I forgot to change them… *facepalm* I’ll go fix them now before I forget again lol!
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