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@trailblazer

WHY DO I KEEP SPELLING YOUR TAG WRONG?!?!?!

@traiblazer

Well hurry up and post/write it so I can read it!!!!!!!! XD NOW I’M CURIOUS!!!!! lol!

@esther-c Yeah, Liv has blue eyes. She also has blue skin and hair XD

Livia

She heard Fynn say “Aww”, and it was clear who he was talking about. Liv wanted to smack him upside the head.

“He is so annoying,” she rolled her eyes.

“Tell me about it,” Lukas muttered under his breath.

Liv’s stomach came alive with butterflies as they danced…[Read more]

@esther-c

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

you’re good!!! You can just read it over on these links. I posted earlier in this thread, or I can send you the Google docs link so you can comment and edit. I can’t send the docs link now because I’m…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Oh, good job!! 💛💛 The eyes look really good!!!

@grcr

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

Aww thanks!

@hybridlore

Sorry, I think my last post lagged.

It’s all Wyoh’s fault…..XD

I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

Okay, great! i’ll think and pray about it, but I’m pretty sure that this fits better than how I had it originally.

@savannah_grace2009

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!!

You’re soo welcome!! 😅

I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

@acancello @hybridlore @grcr

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!! I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

 The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning…

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@savannah_grace2009

it’s all true though…I became such a better writer when I joined KP and after talking to all of you guys!!

I did to! I dont think I would have ever got this is close to finishing without everyone on here <3

@savannah_grace2009

Yeah, that would work!! 😄

Ok, I read them both. The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning chapter. That’s all I have for now, I will go over it more later today if I have time!

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@savannah_grace2009

Hmmm…

Alright, my basic answer: the first one draws me in more and I like its prologue. I do like the first two or three chapters of the second one, though.

I don’t know if you only wanted advice on the first/begining chapter… if so, you don’t have to listen to me or read my next few thoughts…. but if you don’t m…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@savannah_grace2009

This is supposed to say “feel free to tag me in any post”…so yeah…XD

Dont worry, I understood XD I make errors like that all the time 😂

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement is so sweet 🥰

@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@savannah_grace2009

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel. I will defiantly look through your link and give my critique 🙂 And pretty soon I will be posting some of mine to get feedback, I’ll be sure to tag you 🙂