@savannah_grace2009
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whaley replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Oh wow, a lot happened, and I’m overwhelmed just reading this conversation 😅 I can’t address everything y’all and Sara said, but I have a few small thoughts.
About the Pythonos’ redeemability:
I didn’t mean to imply that they can’t be saved! I just meant that they wouldn’t have any draw to be saved, so they can never be sa…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
You are so welcome! Write fast my dear!!! (Otherwise I will hunt you down…..)
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
I’m so glad i could be of help! I cannot wait to read this!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
NO NOBODY IS DYING!!!!! WHAT IS IT WITH YOU AND DEATH?!?!
Oh what? Man. Fine.
It’s not that I want it to be sad, (sad is great in it’s place though) But Christian death scenes can be so beautiful though. Especially when dying for another, and/or as a tie-off to a redemption story.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Like Jonas said, this isn’t a direct correlation. Pythonos do, in fact, represent evil people AND demons. No person is irredemable, as I said earlier in this post. God can save anyone!
Ok, I was just thinking that you were saying they are unredeemable. If that’s not the case then no worries. Sorry if it seemed like i was c…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Thanks @jonas
Yeah, I think we just hit the major plot-hole. I think you need something between Pythonos and people. You see, even the most depraved of people do not become demons. They can certainly become demon possessed, but they themselves will not become demons. And Christ has the power to cast out demons. (I can find…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Lilitu was kind of my “you’re never too far gone” person, because his parents are Jraldath and Selena! There’s going to be this epic confrontation scene where he wrestles with the knowledge that he was meant to be evil from the moment he was born. Does that work? Or do I still need Cassian?
My problem with that is that evil is…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Fine. But sometimes the good characters gotta die.
But there’s a problem there. When we chose to live in sin, or even directly comit evil, there is still hope for us until death. Even the vilest of sinner can be redeemed by the blood of Christ. If you make Pythonos unredeemable, you are almost saying that the blood of…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 4 months ago
Lol….. we’ll just have to see.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
I like their character arch! It sounds great!
I also agree with Jonas, especially if Cass is a Peter-type character. Ok, ultimate redemption––– Cassian is touched by Elroy, (Or one of the others, but i particularly like Elroy for this because he is kinda the family “nobody”) and through Elroy’s faith and selfless actio…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
It’s been a bit since I gave you any feedback, so sorry about that. (It was partially KP’s fault—everything was super messed up and I couldn’t post.) I am going to try to do a feedback session tomorrow morning. I have been reading everyone’s comments though, and I wanted to jump in here.
In regards to the Cassian discussio…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
OH. so I didn’t have to go from page one and work my way up.
You could have said that sooner.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
No, I haven’t. let me go take a look.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Oh I get that. I just mean there was no him thinking he was perfect at all. Like, it seemed to me, the reader, that he was a humble and loving guy who wanted the best for sef and his brothers. There needs to be a little bit of that arogance showing. just a tiny bit. otherwise it’s not real. Ya know?
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HighScribe replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Nooooooo no spoilers 🫣
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Oooooo I LOVE this!!!
Ok, one thing,
You see, Cass has a subconscious drive to pump himself up. He feels insecure about himself, so he manipulates situations in order to get people to look up to him or get praise. He doesn’t fully realize that he’s doing that to Sef, but it’s all a selfish desire to get those feeli…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 4 months ago
Aw, that’s so sweet. It’s always so fun to find a character you can relate to!
Ah, thanks for the heads up! I’ll go see right now.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 4 months ago
Thank you so much!
You like Sabina? Do you see redemption in her, or are you just hoping?
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