SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨

@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer @grcr

THE HOUSE

Teapots rattle in the cabinets. Kaine looks down as the floor shifts under his feet, wavering like water.

“Hello, new residents of this beautiful riverfront cabin. Excuse me, I’m flattering myself. “Who is this?”, you may ask?” A loud voice echoes from the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer

Hugo 

Ottoline found him within minutes. She did really care for him, his eyes must have made her feel sorry for him. No, he didn’t want anyone to feel sorry for him. Ever.

He sat down by the pillar and tried to stop the tears as she came over, but it was…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @hybridlore

Here is a little more….

A few weeks later, I was perched on a hard wooden pew listening to one of Reverend Bradshaw’s sermons on the mercy of God. Clara was seated next to me, her fingers playing with the handkerchief in her lap.

“Rise for the closing hymn,” Reverend Bradshaw directed. We rose, and as throa…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 nice board!

@savannah_grace2009

They are so sweet together!😭 💗 I think I’m going to share Hugos story in the next scene ill write later tonight, I feel so bad having his story told again, Its so sad!

Hottoline forever!!

This is literally the most adorable scene you wrote, I almost cried 🙂

She found him, behind a pillar.

He was crying.

She sat down…

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Kaine

Kaine wanders over to the couch absentmindedly as Hugo rushes out of the room. Lifting his backpack off his shoulders, he slowly opens it to see a small furry face poking out. Kaine’s cat, fluffy, sleepily looks around the new environment as he lifts her from…[Read more]

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Hugo 

It was awful to wake up, but even more awful to be woken up by a girl crying out in pain.

“Ottoline… Ottoline!” He said gently touching her shoulder, “are you alright?”

Her whole body was shaking with fright and tears began to slide down her…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

It should be locked, that will be fun!

@savannah_grace2009

😂

@mineralizedwritings @acancello @savannah_grace2009 @esther-c @trailblazer

I’d be good with that if everyone wants to! lol

Lane

“Yup.” Lane said thoughtfully.

He put his foot on the ground. He looked off into the distance again. A terrible thought dawned on him, and he squinted. Am I about to stay here all night? No… surely not…

Lane…[Read more]

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Kaine

“Oh boy, I’ve done enough talking. Anyway, where are you from, Kaine?”

Kaine gives the boy a quizzical look as he stands on one leg like a flamingo.

And goodness, for fashions sake? Caps are to protect your eyes from the sun!

“I live west of the Crevasse. A bit above the west…[Read more]

@esther-c @grcr @savannah_grace2009 @mineralizedwritings @trailblazer

Heres a new part!

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A boy in tan robes walked up to Hugo. He looked friendly.

“Hello, my name is Amir. You are Hugo, right?”

Hugo grinned, “Hey, yeah. I’m Hugo. Nice to meet you!” They shook hands.

“It seems like no one knows how they got here, like no one sent…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 Oh girl, that sounds like me! The braids all the way… and I had a bonnet, but unfortunately no dress. I used to create forts with bedsheets and pretend I was in a covered wagon lol.

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @mineralizedwritings @acancello @trailblazer @freedomwriter76 @I-think-I-got_everyone-XD

Oh and just so everyone knows, Amir is wearing a tan, robe-like outfit that looks wrapped around his body. But instead of being a robe all the way through, the lower section splits off into wide-legged pants. He’s wearing soft s…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @mineralizedwritings @acancello @anyone else

Kari 

My phone! Kari, standing off to the side, suddenly remembered. Why hadn’t she thought of it before? If she could call someone, then perhaps they could assure her she was fine, and hadn’t lost her sanity. She jerked her phone from her back pocket, turning on the home s…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I am unsure if I missed a chapter or not. Are we just tossed in with Lilitiu and Sef, or did I miss something important? Anyway, I thought the chapter was great! This line:

They knew for a fact that they were being hunted by the Pythonos,

Feels a bit clunky. But other than that, great!

@savannah_grace2009

I think I missed some of the chapters, but I read this one anyway. Needless to say, I didn’t really know what was going on, but I enjoyed it regardless!

One thing that could be improved is right at the end. They decide to jump off the cliff super quickly, but it seems like they still have a bit of time. Most people aren’t goi…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ahh man, I literally just barely missed the next chapter reveal. I guess I’ll have to read it tomorrow🙃

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, I’m finally gonna get through the rest of your chapters:

I enjoyed chapter 3. It functions as a proper first chapter (Lilitu is the real main character, right?), all the previous ones seemed more like a series of prologues. This is fine, The Way of Kings, the first book of the Stormlight Archives by Brandon Sanderson did…[Read more]