Sam Kowal

@inkling-for-christ Well… ‘the baby squealed’ is telling what happened but it’s not emotional telling, which is what limits the story. Your second example is certainly more descriptive, but sometimes you’re not going to want that much detail or your story will be extremely long.

I would focus on the emotional telling, for example, you…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl

He will forgo a lightsaber for the simplicity and tickling powers of a simple broom…

@that_writer_girl_99 They Rey/Kylo conflict and relationship was my favorite part, too. The moment in the throne room… my breath was caught halfway up my

@ethryndal That’s a really intriguing idea, about the Knights of Ren. It seems like either they would have to take over as main villains, or Episode 9 wouldn’t really have one, because Kylo…[Read more]

@emily-d I really, really liked A Wrinkle In Time

It was  thoughtful, meaningful, almost spiritual, and it had a lot of intriguing symbolism and thing s like that. Open respect for Christianity, too, although it did mention there being good qualities in other religions.

Plus, Meg and Calvin are really great characters. Meg’s internal conflicts…[Read more]

@inkling-for-christ Yes, that’s exactly it. SHOW the environment, don’t have the narrator TELL the reader what it looks like. Have it be more like you’re looking directly through the narrator into the story, rather than that they’re trying to summarize what they saw for you and tell it back to you

@emily-d I really, really liked A Wrinkle In Time

It was  thoughtful, meaningful, almost spiritual, and it had a lot of intriguing symbolism and thing s like that. Open respect for Christianity, too, although it did mention the good qualities of other religions.

Plus, Meg and Calvin are really great characters. Meg’s internal conflicts are easy…[Read more]

@emily-d 😀 Yeah, I have read it

I was at first expecting to completely hate it

But, I actually really like it

Elizabeth is a great character, and the plot is interesting, and Jane Austen’s writing is really sophisticated and intelligent

It’s lacking all of its dragons, and 100% percent of its epic battle scenes, but it’s still quite…[Read more]

@winter-rose I love the updated one

I think there needs to be something more connecting the first sentence with the second, though.

It would work great early on to have

Another bodyguard would give anything to protect a lady from the Slate family.

BUT Cocky Rook Warren is afraid of girls, or at least that’s what his fellow bodyguards a…

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@inkling-for-christ  Everything that the course teaches about showing and the techniques to use it more effectively, for example, body language, can be transferred into first person just by changing what the character says, for example

“I walked down the hall slowly, feeling nervous (telling)

would change to

“I shuffled down the hall, my hands…[Read more]

@inkling-for-christ

😀 I got the same email

Stan and I got the course, too

I’m really liking it so far

I’ve watched about half of Part 1

All I can say is, @daeus thanks for making such a good learning tool available for free, and great job

@winter-rose XD This sounds really funny

I’m guessing Rook is actually an alternate version of Sam, from another dimension?

I don’t have much experience with blurbs, but I like this one. It seems slightly long, like the others are saying.

“A different bodyguard would give anything to protect a member of the Slate family.

Not Rook. Not if his…

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@alia Well, you’re right, a lot of it was a copy… but for some reason they played it in a way that seemed fresh to me. Although, I will say, the characters were definitely a stronger point than the plot

I think it would have been great for Rey to turn to the dark side, too 😀

That moment when Kylo says “Let’s leave everything behind. Snoke,…[Read more]

@shannon Yep, I play guitar… more like I’m learning it right now

I can’t play super fast fingering

🙂 That’s another good idea. If I have enough time, I might try to that at some point.

@aislinn-mollisong XD XD @dekreel You’re right. That does sound like an awesome first line 😀 I wouldn’t be so sure you can’t write songs @aislinn-mollisong…[Read more]

@catwing … that would make sense. And you’re right, the laws of physics and order are completely different there, in some ways

@lady-iliara 😀 Thanks! I’m glad

@winter-rose 😀 That was amazing. I’m glad us Kapeefers could be in the credits for such a thing. XD Really funny, and you totally nailed the horror of the spilled hot chocolate.                               Part Two, pleeeeaaaseee

@that_writer_girl_99
Oh, dear… this sounds really cool, but I don’t consider myself an expert advice dispenser. I’ll just try to answer the questions you exampled to get myself started…

Inspiration) Ideas inspire me. Images, senses, impressions of something that I need to carve out- whether that’s a world for a story, or an exciting…[Read more]

@introvert_girl Hmm, that’s kind of a tough one for me. I haven’t ever done that before.

😀 XD XD The first thing I thought of when reading the first couple lines of your post was the new Star Wars films!  They definitely could have had a really hard time with that. Han, Luke, and Leia were some of the most beloved characters of all time… and…[Read more]

@gabbyj

Stan really, really takes offense at this. He is a dragon, after all. And an angry one, right now.

*puts Stan to bed*

*whispers*

Okay, now maybe I can help.

So, it sorta depends on the dragon. Someone like Stan… well, that would be pretty easy. He’s small and can’t fly. (please, don’t ever read that, Stan.)

Whereas one like @dragon-…[Read more]

@bethanysinkyroses 😀 Welcome back

I’m pretty new here, so I don’t even remember you, but… Stan says Hi

(Stan is my dragon pal. When he was little, he was a runt. So his momma threw him out the nest (dragons do not value small stature in their society)

So I rescued him, and now he’s my pal.

😀 That’s Stan behind me, actually. He’s spiky, and…[Read more]

Wow, that was a long post. XD XD

I guess I really did like The Last Jedi