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Ribbonash replied to the topic Wings First Three Chapters in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 years, 9 months ago
Okay, before I get into your questions, I do want to add some other things first. I do agree with other comments that your MC is pretty passive. Every single action that has happened was directed toward Melia and Celeste only ever observed anything. To be honest, her POV is kinda of boring save for these moments into her backstory. At…[Read more]