Grace W.

@bluejay I don’t believe they’re native; the neighbours just have a lot. 😀

@bluejay No, I don’t live in Albany, but we sometimes go down there to visit family or for holidays (we haven’t in a while, though)

@bluejay That’s so pretty! Looks like Albany here in WA.

@bluejay Glad you’re feeling better. 🙂

My favourite kind of days are the stormy, windy ones, seeing palm trees bend so far that you’d think there was a hurricane, and hearing the wind rattling the blinds. There’s something comforting about that for me (depending on how stormy it’s getting to be 😉 )

Just out of curiosity, do you live in…[Read more]

@bluejay Praying! 🙂 It’s no fun being sick, especially if you’re nauseated. 🙁

Hi Kenya! It’s nice to see you again. 🙂

@mark_kamibaya

Absolutely! 😀

@timothy-young Haha, yes, like I said, we were thinking of selecting one “main” author so it has one “voice” and wasn’t different every chapter. But we’d all have contributed ideas and suggestions.

@timothy-young

This sounds like a very interesting idea, Timothy. The only problem I would see (which you have already pointed out) is making the ideas go together. Like you said, see it as a challenge, but challenge or no, sometimes two ideas just don’t make sense together. (A way to try and avoid this could be specifying the…[Read more]

@mark-kamibaya

The only one I know of is the Hero’s Journey. I recently learned about that one. Could you explain the others?

@emma-flournoy:

Pandora will probably develop her character a bit further during the story, showing some other personalities other than ISTJ. I can’t wait to see where I take her and James, and I don’t just mean location-wise! 😀

@dragon-snapper

Hooks are not my forte (I struggle writing a good opening line) My usual go-to is possibly a line of dialogue, so you’re jumping in right in the middle of a conversation (and you’d use some backstory to find out how we got here)
Or describing a scene (an example from my own writing, “Two weary travellers stood on the dusty…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper

Hooks are not my forte (I struggle writing a good opening line) My usual go-to is possibly a line of dialogue, so you’re jumping in right in the middle of a conversation (and you’d use some backstory to find out how we got here)
Or describing a scene (an example from my own writing, “Two weary travellers stood on the dusty…[Read more]

@daeus

In a twist of fate, he is forced to confront everything he fights for shattered, everything he cherishes put to the test, and a long-hidden truth that will threaten his life.

This sentence is feeling very clumsy (I can’t tell if it is clumsy, or I’m just not reading it right)
But like @dragon-snapper said. Perhaps “…he is forced to…[Read more]

@daeus

In a twist of fate, he is forced to confront everything he fights for shattered, everything he cherishes put to the test, and a long-hidden truth that will threaten his life.

This sentence is feeling very clumsy (I can’t tell if it is clumsy, or I’m just not reading it right)
But like @dragon-snapper said. Perhaps “…he is forced to…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper

I also quite liked (and still do, somewhat) the battle droids, they’re so strange looking. 😀 I think I appreciate little-boy Anakin, because he was a child in a movie full of grown-ups, and I always appreciated and liked the child characters as a child myself (but what child doesn’t? Especially if said child character is a Chosen…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper @daeus

One last thing, you say he ‘takes on’ the character. Well, at a glance, I might thing that he’s trying to fight this character.

Yeah, this confused me, too. Is he fighting this guy, or is he becoming this guy? (that was my first thought) And also, saying what “he fights for is shattered” can’t really give us any meani…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy

Yes, I should think so. 😀 Such a shame, all the stuff cool is happening in the States. 😛 We don’t even have a Disneyland here (yet…?) 😛

@daeus

It’s really good, I think I’m interested. I think I agree with @kate-flournoy about the slight choppiness of the whole thing. Perhaps a little more backstory? (I am not an expert on how synopses work, so I don’t know how much one should put in and how much one should leave out)

“…but strange events keep thwarting his every move. In a…[Read more]

I’d probably rate it 8 too. Well, we’re consistent. 😛

Yeah, I think it’s pretty good, and considering I’m not really good at synopses, you’ve done a better job than me. 😛 Oh, and I see what @kate-flournoy means by the “Something something something, something something something result,” structure. Like she said, you may want to vary. Like, we…[Read more]