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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
@linus-smallprint @keilah-h @hybridlore
“Joseph!” Asher yelled.
Joseph spun toward his friend and saw the ball in his hand. “Throw it!” he shouted, running several paces backwards.
Asher threw the ball and Joseph caught it. Eric came racing out of the house, whooping in the afternoon sunshine.
The days were growing warmer, and with the spri…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Thanks y’all! This was so great to come home to!
I’m glad y’all liked Adrian’s reintroduction! It’s one of my favorite scenes.
Ah, thanks Linus for the typo catches.
There we go, there is that Ardenta mistrust appearing.
Yes. Glad you caught that! Not only is the poor kid traumatized by soldiers, (as alluded to in…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
AHHHH!!!!! LOVE THIS!!! I think this is gonna be my favorite book yet!!!
As for the PTSD triggers, if you could list all the triggers under the names of the two guys, i can help you try to brainstorm ways they would avoid them. At the moment, I’m not sure which triggers they would be. I mean, for some soldiers after war,…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @rae @grcr @raxforge @whalekeeper
Leon — Elderstrand (w/Ellis, Fel, Sara, Marcel, Julian, Baron, Marcellus, Ben Gunn, Flare)
Leon shook Marcel’s hand firmly. “No, I was hoping you did. My friend and I slipped through the gates while the guards were preoccupied with something, we met Brutus already in the c…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @rae @grcr @raxforge
Leon — Elderstrand (w/Ellis, Fel, Sara, Marcel, Julian, Baron, Marcellus, Ben Gunn, Flare)
Leon shook Marcel’s hand firmly. “No, I was hoping you did. My friend and I slipped through the gates while the guards were preoccupied with something, we met Brutus already in the c…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
Leon — Elderstrand (w/Ellis, Fel, Sara, Marcel, Julian, Baron, Marcellus, Ben Gunn, Flare)
Leon shook Marcel’s hand firmly. “No, I was hoping you did. My friend and I slipped through the gates while the guards were preoccupied with something, we met Brutus already in the city, and Ben and Flare fell off the roof on us. Then our newest c…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
@ellette-giselle I echo Linus’s statement–this was a great way to re-introduce Adrian to the narrative!
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@power I had a song on in the background that started epic then turned really goofy as I read your little poem and it was perfect for it lolllll
thing is, it was by complete coincidence.
@freed_and_redeemed oooh nice scene!!
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Koshka replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
AHHHHHH. I love the name Nikolai. Very nice. I might be more excited about the 3rd book than even the other two, although that would be kinda hard. *Stares hungrily at scene snippet*
As for life, yours is nuts too? It’s kinda reassuring to know I’m not the only KPer accidentally ghosting the kingdom. I don’t know if that…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
There we go, there is that Ardenta mistrust appearing. Poor Joseph. It’s completely understandable why he freaked out. I’m glad this is how you reintroduced Adrian to us instead of just having Joseph already know and accept him. It adds a little tension and some dramatic irony. It is a good way for Joseph to begin to understand…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @rar @grcr @raxforge
Marcel — Elderstrand (w/Ellis, Fel, Sara, Leon, Julian, Baron, Marcellus, Ben Gunn, Flare) This name list is so long. XD
“I’m Marcel.” He held Leon’s hand firmly. His speech was quieter and more gutteral than the other’s, and he made a conscious effort to raise it over the…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
Whoa, what happened to Brutus’ speech?
When whispering, /s/ and /t/ are most pronounced and can be overheard. Brutus often replaces these sounds with /th/ when whispering. It’s a precaution.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
@ellette-giselle no it’s not bad, I just haven’t read it yet. Lol
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@whalekeeper @jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @grcr @rae @raxforge
Leon and Julian –> with Baron, Ben Gunn, Marcellus, and Flare, meeting up with Ellis, Marcel, Sara, and Fel. Elderstrand edge.
Leon narrowed his eyes. He couldn’t be sure… but were those feathers on the stranger’s shoulders? He shook the thought aside. “We also came from ou…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@whalekeeper @jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @grcr @rae @raxforge
Leon and Julian –> with Baron, Ben Gunn, Marcellus, and Flare, meeting up with Ellis, Marcel, Sara, and Fel. Elderstrand edge.
Leon narrowed his eyes. He couldn’t be sure… but were those feathers on the stranger’s shoulders? He shook the thought aside. “We a…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @grcr @rae @raxforge is that everyone?
Marcel — Elderstrand (w/Ellis, Fel, Sara)
Before answering, Marcel glanced at Ellis, who still watched the road. The sword-wielding young man gave a nod. The soldiers had passed them.
“We came from outside the city,” Marcel called. “The soldiers think we’re…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
wow.
crickets.
I didn’t think it was THAT bad.
lololol
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
Whoa, what happened to Brutus’ speech?
@grcr @raxforge @whalekeeper @hybridlore @loopylin @jonas
Leon and Julian –> with Baron, Ben Gunn, Marcellus, and Flare, about to meet up with Ellis, Marcel, Sara, and Fel. Elderstrand edge.
Leon squinted through the rain. The storm was muting the other sounds around them, but he was sure h…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 10 months ago
aw! Love it!!!!
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