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@rae

I actually recently wrote a short scene somewhat like this, where a character’s arm got shot by a poison arrow and he had to have an amputation. Basically I did it from the amputee’s part until he blacked out and then from his bystanding friend’s standpoint. I definitely think you should go with @ellette-giselle ‘s idea, but to build on it…[Read more]

@rae Yeah, personally I think it should switch between the two characters, unless the whole book is solidly from one character’s POV, in which case stick with him.

@rae ok cool!

@everyone else I’ll review your drawings tomorrow! I have to get my brother on this because I share the character with him.

@rae

I second @ellette-giselle, but I would probably make the larger portion of it Mandin’s, and then a shorter scene/s from Nahim’s point of view. Being inside the mind of a character who’s depressed and delirious can be disorienting (wow, alliteration there lol.) Except if the rest of the book is from Nahim’s POV–then, it might be better just…[Read more]

@rae

I like Ellette’s idea. So my first vote would go to that…

But then my second vote would be for the whole POV to be Mandin.

😄

@rae

Ooo, I love these scenes. I find it most satisfying as a reader if you do a mix of both. Go from one point of view to another. Keep it fluid, but let us feel both characters struggles and grief.

So like this:

Good sized chunk about Nahim. (two to five paragraphs i would say, or somewhere around there)

***

Good sized chunk about…[Read more]

@rae so kinda both? Like a form of self-insert?

I’ve done kinda the same thing before too. It’s why I always wrote Huntress’s POV in the roleplays from first person–she’s partially built off a heavily distorted me, and thus I find it much easier to write her from the inside rather than from externally.

@grcr all right!!

@linus-smallprint @rae @ellette-giselle is that everyone who was in the challenge? I still have to get to work on my drawing lol

@rae Cool! My brother’s a great worldbuilder and did a similar thing with his Icebreaker Empire’s alphabet. They have the same number of sounds as in English, but have a writing system where every phoneme (letter sound) corresponds to one letter (thus having 40 or so symbols). It’s a lot easier to learn to read that way if you don’t have to deal…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint ooh awesome!!

@rae ahh ok! Yeah it’s a little more intuitive, but hard to get used to. also that’s an awesome name for the Skwadron. Any in universe reason why the word is spelled with  “SK” instead of “QU” or was it just for fun?

@everyone else I know I said I was going to judge today, but I’m not sure if everyone who did a…[Read more]

@rae boomerangs?

also how come you use 21:00? You’re not in the US? (You don’t have to say specifically where you’re from.)

@rae

Mandin never struck me as the punching type.😂 And your brothers sound like mine.

@rae lol the way that you listed what your characters are doing as if it was going on in the same house as the dog and your brothers and the cat and the chicken pot pie…..lol

@rae

I love it!

@highscribeofaetherium

We could nickname him Cud.

@rae

Yep, highscribe is right. It’s also too friendly. I mean, how dare they eat our pictures!!! This needs to be a horrible terrible villain who is completely depraved and the worst of all master villains because he chews up beautiful characters before THEY EVER SEE THE LIGHT OF DAY!!!!

How about Diablo or Viper!

@rae

I like it, but it’s a bit long, and hard to scream in fury, ya know?

@keilah-h Haha, thank you. Fanfics are so fun😂

and yeahhh, it’s def not the best thing😅💀

@rae Ty!!! 💖

@smiley Thanks 😁 and ikr? Tony just being Tony I guess XD

and oooh, that sounds like fun!

@savannah_grace2009 @rae @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @ellette-giselle @keilah-h @grcr @whalekeeper @loopylin @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @anyone-else-idk-lol

I realized I hadn’t shared these scenes I wanted to share😂 This is an earlier chapter in Broken Shackles, one of the first 10 chapters…and I just wanted to share it since I just edited…[Read more]