Ruth

@rae

lol. A RP is short for role play.

@acancello @mineralizedwritings @rae @trailblazer @esther-c

I will not allow this RP to die!!!!

haha

who wants to write the next RP?

@rae

I’m not sure what you found wrong with this scene. I think it’s well written! It feels like I’m reading a published book!

@rae

Hello, nice to meet you! (Totally get the characters & story ideas, lol)

1 what genre do you like to write?

I do a variety–historical fiction, mystery, a little sci-fi, and lately mostly fantasy. I’ve done a few plays as well, and I have a lot of poems. Right now, I’m working on an epic fantasy, and some fairy tales for a side project.…[Read more]

@rae

Yeah, don’t worry if you don’t get to all of them! I know it can be a lot, lol.

@rae

Thanks! That’s so sweet <3

And I’ll go back to EDITING on the first part like you said. You have great feedback! Wanna read the whole thing, XD I’ll post the link! https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ (if you don’t want to that’s totally fine!) Unfortunately, I don’t have any more chapters following this one, but if you want to critique the…[Read more]

@esther-c @acancello @trailblazer @grcr @rae @mineralizedwritings

Ottoline

“Ottoline! Where are you?” Hugo’s voice echoed down the stairwell. His voice contained some sort of urgency. “Ottoline!” She heard his footsteps coming down the stairs. “There you are,” he sighed when he saw her and smiled his crooked smile that never failed to make…[Read more]

@rae

Sounds good!! I love your style, btw. It’s fresh and unique. 😊

@savannah_grace2009

I don’t think it’s too clunky. There may be a few places where it could be made a little smoother, but I’m not sure how to fix that. 😅 If this is just your first or second draft, then I think it’s definitely fine how it is. 🙂

@rae

Also what kind of things do you most want criticism on? Grammar? Style? Story structure?

I can also just read it and tell you the things I like about it. : )

@rae

Hello!

I’m sorry I didn’t see you tagging me for a while. I finally started reading your story and I’m enjoying it so far, but I’m only halfway through chapter two. I have a really hard time reading the italics and long paragraphs, but I’m not giving up! I’ll give you a longer response later when I finish it.

Thanks for tagging me. Sorry I…[Read more]

@rae @hybridlore @mineralizedwritings @esther-c

I’ve been working on this chapter this morning…and it feels a little clunky to me. Do you guys have any input that you think would make it run smoother?

Chapter 14

The air was pleasantly cold, nipping the tip of Sef’s nose as she walked in step with Lilitu. The sound of leaves crunching b…[Read more]

@rae

Wait is that from a prequel/sequel? Nice!

@rae

“All right, all right already. I’ve got a headache and I’m seeing kinda double and I feel weird in that I’m concerned on winning a war and you’re concerned about what I should be concerned about.”

“Well this is worrying.” …

Haha that’s funny

@rae

Thanks so much, girl! (Lately I’ve been second guessing myself, lol)

If you want to read the whole thing, here’s the link:

https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ

(Of course you don’t have to if you don’t want to, haha)

@savannah_grace2009 (Ok, awesome!) @grcr @rae @trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @acancello

Hedieh

As Hedieh twirled around the room with Amir, she couldn’t help but smile. This was so much fun. As the music slowly stopped, Hedieh sighed and let her hands fall to her sides. “You caught on pretty quickly.”

“That doesn’t mean it w…[Read more]

@esther-c

Here’s the next chapter:

Marcurious was fighting to stay conscious.

The poison had the world swirling dizzily around him, and the ceiling became the floor as the room was inverted. He was barely aware of the Traitor sitting at a large computer typing obnoxiously.

His eyelids closed halfway.

No! Have to stay…..awake…..

Just bef…

[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Aww, I love that!! Tauren and Lesli’s dynamic is one of my favorites. 🥰

@savannah_grace2009

I’d love to read the next part!!

@rae

I like it! I’d say just spend some time developing his character more if you aren’t sure what you want to go for yet. I develop characters by creating their personality and such, then writing…[Read more]

@rae

I’m not really sure what your question is, lol. But I like your writing, I think it’s fine how you have it.

@mineralizedwritings

I love it!!

@rae

Of course! You’re welcome anywhere! I usually just pop in and reply to things XD