Ruth

@rae

 Do you want to go out dragon slaying without any clue whatsoever?

YEAH! LET’S DO IT!!

jk lol

@rae

Scouting missions are essential to any military campaign.

True, but this isn’t exactly a military campaign. They can’t send scouts all the way to all the locations.

@rae

Maybe we should have a map? Or can you at least give us some locations that are on it for some reference?

@rae

Yeah that’s helpful. I guess the other thing is, are they sending Lillenings out as scouts, or trying to do the scouting themselves? The first option is probably going to be easiest and quickest.

@rae @esther-c @trailblazer

Okay. Someone else can start, cause I don’t know what to do. I think the last one was a Kari POV. If you need to reference it, you should be able to find it in the doc.

@rae @savannah_grace2009

Callista

“No, I just got here. Is there a place to go check in or something? I thought there would be more people around…where is everyone?”

Callista chuckled. “Um… I’m not sure if there’s a place to check in or not. But I have room in my dorm if you want to come stay with me. As for where everyone is… I’m not entirel…[Read more]

@everyone

This seems like a good place to end the villains’ scene, unless anyone wants to do anything still.

@rae @trailblazer @esther-c

Do you want to go back to Nora, Kari, Kate, and Amir planning the scouting missions?

@rae

Nice! I really like it!

I agree with what everyone else has said, especially that there were a lot of run-on sentences. But overall, it’s really great so far!

@rae

Those are both amazing! (Sorry I missed the one you posted a few days ago, I don’t have notifics activated so I’m likely to miss tags unless it’s something I check on often)

I love this line:

But the hero is the one who bleeds,

Red drops that fall like planter’s seeds.

Great job with both of them!

@rae

I really liked it!

Everyone else already mentioned the main thing I noticed, which was everything was a little confusing. There were a lot of run-on sentences that had so much action and I was unable to keep track of who was doing what. 😅 But besides that I thought it was really good and I am very intrigued.

@rae

I like it too! I did notice it was a little confusing like the others said, but it sounds like you’ve got that covered!

@savannah_grace2009

I like those scenes!

@rae

Nooo! 😭😭😭😭

@rae

😭😭😭😭😭😫😫😫😫😖😖😖😭😭😖

@rae

i love that scene!!!!!!!

@rae

Is this a typo?

Fetch her! And you will not, I can

I assume it was supposed to be ‘if’ not ‘and’

@rae

😭😭😭😭😭😭 (oh dear, I almost put a barfing emoji in there)

@loopylin @princesachronicle22 @rae I’m so sorry I took so long to get around to this y’all 🙁

Tyler

I blinked, racking my brain for any locations that matched Duvaal and The Sultaian desert, but couldn’t recall any.

But that’s not surprising. I never have been exactly good at geometry…

“I don’t think I’ve heard of that before,” I said q…[Read more]

@rae

We need a Koshtin POV. No hurry though.

Tagging some people! I know this was created a while ago but we really do need a solid world building thread.

@calyhuge @folith-feolin @otherworldlyhistorian @godlyfantasy12 (yes I am still consistently tagging u) @keilah-h @jonas @rae

@rae

Yeah, I was a little worried about that…do you think it would help if I gave Brenna’s master a name? The young soldier must remain unnamed, for my own reasons, but I could give the master a name. I’ll rearrange the paragraphs so it’s easier to understand what’s going on.

Yeah, I think that would help a lot.

For the title, maybe “Murderer”?