Ruth

@rae

I see. Does Jr. have any history with medical needles?

Saoirse

Saoirse cocked her head. “Hello, Jaz. But what is– he? She?”

@rae

Ugh, needles. I hate needles. The mere idea of pricking my finger sends shivers down my spine.

Saoirse

“Other people care about their broken toes.” Saoirse pointed out. “Emperor’s son? I know one of those. Not a fan. What’s that?” She gestured at the reptilian creature. “I’ve never seen something like that before.”

@rae

Ooh, fun. Hidden knives. And dragons.

@rae

Ah, a fellow boot rebel! I’ll see if I can get Saoirse to talk to him…

@rae

Yeah, I kind of assumed it was indescribable.

@rae

I’ve never smelled like a horse in my life… lol. What does a horse even smell like? I’m sure I’ve smelled them at some point before, but I’ve never noticed.

@rae

Thanks! I fixed the stall part in my document, but it won’t let me edit my post anymore.

@rae

I can see that you did. …that’s a first…

@rae

Okay. Weird. A razor knife isn’t a particularly dangerous weapon. I just thought it was funny that the school is allowing literally any weapon that isn’t a firearm, but not things like paper. Irl, schools tend to be super restrictive about weapons.

@rae

Ok, I knew it had some connection to cough drops.

@jonas @rae

I added a few sentences that hopefully resolve it a little better? I’m not sure. Do you still think it’s missing something?

… I can’t believe I didn’t see it before—who he was. The suspicion has grown inside of me for weeks, strengthening with each day that passed. When the guards disappeared from the marketplace. When the curfe…

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@rae

What’s a menthol?

@rae

Alright! XD Thanks, I appreciate it.

@rae Hehe ok. I can rp that soon

@rae

Yeah I had way too much fun writing it XD

@rae

I think I get it. I’m probably always going to read it in my head as “realm” with an n (nothing sounds wrong about that to me) just cause that’s how it looks. So it’s basically just that there’s a bit of separation between the vowels in the middle? Or do you actually pronounce a sharp “EE” sound in there? Is it more like the word “real”, but…[Read more]

@rae

I can’t think of anything right now, (although I do still have to introduce my new character), but I might later. If someone else wants to, go ahead.

@rae

The story overall was good. I’m not sure the framing device you used was necessary. There are a few typos and awkward sentences, but I won’t bother pointing them out unless you would like me to. I feel like you were a bit heavy on getting the “moral” across. It might be better to let Nahim/the reader figure it out on his/their own. The act…[Read more]

@grcr

Oooh I love it!!

@rae

He sounds really cool!