Ruth

@rae Hiiiiiiiii!!!

First off, your descriptions are absolutely FABULOUS, girl!! Like, I can see this scene so much <3

and now for your questions…

1. Not at all! I think it’s a good length for a scene!
2. nope, I don’t think so!
3. Yessssss, very much so! I really loved the body language and it really conveyed Nahim’s feelings/emotions/fears…

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@rae

1. I don’t think the scene is too short. I do have to wonder if it is necessary though. It’s hard to say without context, but it doesn’t seem to move the plot forward really. I also would consider that the reader is likely expecting to hear Nahim’s backstory and feel like they’re being cheated out of it.

2. No, I think it’s fine.

3. Yes. I…[Read more]

@rae

Helloooo, I’m heeeeere

1. Feels like average length to me! Then again it isn’t in book format on KP, and is one continuous page, so I may be gauging it incorrectly. I think if it’s 2-3 pages long on your document, that feels adequate.

2. If it’s the end of a chapter, it works as a summary. If not, I don’t think it’s too abrupt to have in…[Read more]

@rae

Maybe they have to find a special macguffin in the middle of this fairy tale land, that will effectively send them back home? Like Oz? And creatures keep attacking them to protect the special artifact? Just spitting ideas here lol.

@loopylin @rae

There are at least five good teachers tho! There’s Mr. Gregory ofc. Then there’s the art teacher with the red and yellow scarf, Miss Soleil, and the two dance instructors with a romance subplot.

…Granted, I created all of these characters XD But nice adults are underrated in fiction and deserve screentime.
Sebzter
The twins and…[Read more]

@rae

AHHHHHH NOT SKINWALKERS!!!!

*hides in corner*

@rae does he use “bullets” as an exclamation? That’s hilarious.

Jaylen

Someone barged in as she tried to figure out what exactly was going on.

“Freeze! Wait…are you a Fettian?! I thought I was the only one around here! Bullets, another Fettian ruining my fun. Well, don’t say I’m breaking any rules at any point in time cuz I’m not despite p…[Read more]

@esther-c @whalekeeper @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @rae @joy-calle @keilah-h @anyone-else-idk-lol

Sooooo I’m currently working on a scene for one of my novels…and I need some advice😅

The two MCs of this novel have both been imprisoned by Soviet Forces (this is 1950s East Germany, btw) for being involved in the underground church.

It’s…[Read more]

@rae @whalekeeper Agreed. Or we could practice writing morally good adult characters which is a lot harder than I thought it would be.

Dante

“Fine with me.”

@loopylin @rae

I think this school needs help. Like a student council or somethin.

Sebzter

Chase, the detention boy, appeared once more. He was out of breath and quite out of his mind.

As the teacher came towards them, with less enthusiasm than exhaustion, Seb noted the slight vibration coming from their barricade. It would fall down…[Read more]

@rae nice! He looks really science-fiction-y, like something out of Tron, but without the glowing lines and stuff.

also I’m good with fangs, even if they look kinda like a vampire’s. I actually LIKE fangs. Maybe that has something to do with my sharp lower canines.

anyway I’ll RP for Hunter now.

Hunter

She looked straight up at him, her…[Read more]

@rae Oof the poor teacher 😅 @whalekeeper

Dante

Dante thought about Seb’s words, then quickly decided he didn’t like thinking about them. Oddly, he kinda understood. He stared at the same nothing as his friend.

A loud pounding on the door behind him snapped him out of it. He hopped to his feet and stood in front of Seb, arms crossed.

“You thi…[Read more]

@rae

I made her up but she’s an NPC, so go ahead. She might be hard to find in the dark though XD

@rae lol! Yeah, over where I’m at we feel the same about gnats and mosquitoes. (“Mayfly” is a better name than “Mosquito” anyway lol)

(oh, and when you add Silvanis, you can probably add him in the same general area if you want him and Jaylen to meet.)

Hunter

Mayfly pointed at him, tilting her head.

“You want to know my name?” He realized h…[Read more]

@rae

Hunter

The tiny creature–female, by the looks of her–reached out to touch his tail. He made sure the six spikes on the end were flat against it so they didn’t impale her by accident.

She then seemed to pick up on his question and spelled something in the air using water, but it was a foreign language to him. She leaped through the water,…[Read more]

@rae He sounds awesome lol. I can’t wait for my charrie to meet him.

Teleporter incidents? Yeah, Jaylen’s actually no stranger to that. Maybe she’ll tell him about the bread incident of ’79 sometime.

Also, I liked seeing Ilsa’s thoughts. She’s so cute.

@whalekeeper lol Winston is not having it.

Hunter

Something small was moving in the…[Read more]

@rae @keilah-h @whoever

Winston

The demon boy took some time to absorb the sight. The sun warmed up his scales, and he periodically closed his eyes to soak it in. When he could enjoy it no more, he walked west, towards where the evening would be the brightest.

Every time he came to a hilltop, he ran his hands over the sheep, as if running…[Read more]

@rae yeah! Definitely will make for some funny interactions.

@loopylin @whalekeeper

We can just add anything to this world, right? I’m going to add Hunter into a palace not unlike his ancestor Snake’s, and Jaylen I’ll add into a house she’ll recognize.

Hunter

He awoke in a building, sprawling above him. He recognized it from the old…[Read more]

@jonas cool idea!

I think @rae already has something like that going……

I’m willing to join two though lol