Ruth

@rae

Ok here we go Sorry school has been busy getting back to it

Should I tag Sara?

Johnny

There was enough broad-leafed foliage, and the two victims were talking earnestly enough that they couldn’t see or hear the approaching Society. It also helped that everyone stayed completely silent.

Slick held up three fingers, then two, then one.

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@theshadow you’re good! I was just about to ask if we could get back to this lol

@kyronthearcanin @rae @theducktator @princesachronicle22

Sniper

“The only question is why, though, and how.” Trevor replied.

I thought back to my previous experience bein’ transported to a mysterious world, but I found I could remember nothin’ but huntin’ oth…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin @rae @theducktator @keilah-h @princesachronicle22

Weird, I thought I replied to this. Oh well.

Trevor 

“So, Trevor… we’re all in the same boat, then. Great. Any ideas of what’s going on? Someone who hates us all equally, even though we’ve never met?” Naria asked, wrinkling her snout as she spoke. Trevor was about to answer, w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @smiley @mineralizedwritings @lightoverdarkness6 @koshka @whalekeeper @loopylin @kyronthearcanin @grcr @rae @savannah_grace2009 @euodia-vision @elishavet-pidyon @anyone-else @I’m-too-overwhelmed-to-remember-tags-lolllll

I’ve been inactive on KP for the past several days, I know XXD It’s been a crazy past few days, esp…[Read more]

@rae

I would encourage you to play around with it and see what you like. This is a first or second draft, so I wouldn’t worry too much about the POVs being in the right place.

But yeah, I really like what Calyhuge suggested. Sometimes you just have to write and figure it out as well. Definitely write from both POVs in this part of the draft, t…[Read more]

@grcr @linus-smallprint @rae @ellette-giselle ok! I still don’t have my own drawing of the character, but my brother and I will judge each of your drawings on how close they were to our imagining of Feather!

They were all really good and really close to my thoughts. You all got the scar in the right place, too!

• I like the way you did the…

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@rae

I actually recently wrote a short scene somewhat like this, where a character’s arm got shot by a poison arrow and he had to have an amputation. Basically I did it from the amputee’s part until he blacked out and then from his bystanding friend’s standpoint. I definitely think you should go with @ellette-giselle ‘s idea, but to build on it…[Read more]

@rae Yeah, personally I think it should switch between the two characters, unless the whole book is solidly from one character’s POV, in which case stick with him.

@rae ok cool!

@everyone else I’ll review your drawings tomorrow! I have to get my brother on this because I share the character with him.

@rae

I second @ellette-giselle, but I would probably make the larger portion of it Mandin’s, and then a shorter scene/s from Nahim’s point of view. Being inside the mind of a character who’s depressed and delirious can be disorienting (wow, alliteration there lol.) Except if the rest of the book is from Nahim’s POV–then, it might be better just…[Read more]

@rae

I like Ellette’s idea. So my first vote would go to that…

But then my second vote would be for the whole POV to be Mandin.

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@rae

Ooo, I love these scenes. I find it most satisfying as a reader if you do a mix of both. Go from one point of view to another. Keep it fluid, but let us feel both characters struggles and grief.

So like this:

Good sized chunk about Nahim. (two to five paragraphs i would say, or somewhere around there)

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Good sized chunk about…[Read more]

@rae so kinda both? Like a form of self-insert?

I’ve done kinda the same thing before too. It’s why I always wrote Huntress’s POV in the roleplays from first person–she’s partially built off a heavily distorted me, and thus I find it much easier to write her from the inside rather than from externally.

@grcr all right!!

@linus-smallprint @rae @ellette-giselle is that everyone who was in the challenge? I still have to get to work on my drawing lol

@rae Cool! My brother’s a great worldbuilder and did a similar thing with his Icebreaker Empire’s alphabet. They have the same number of sounds as in English, but have a writing system where every phoneme (letter sound) corresponds to one letter (thus having 40 or so symbols). It’s a lot easier to learn to read that way if you don’t have to deal…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint ooh awesome!!

@rae ahh ok! Yeah it’s a little more intuitive, but hard to get used to. also that’s an awesome name for the Skwadron. Any in universe reason why the word is spelled with  “SK” instead of “QU” or was it just for fun?

@everyone else I know I said I was going to judge today, but I’m not sure if everyone who did a…[Read more]

@rae boomerangs?

also how come you use 21:00? You’re not in the US? (You don’t have to say specifically where you’re from.)

@rae

Mandin never struck me as the punching type.😂 And your brothers sound like mine.

@rae lol the way that you listed what your characters are doing as if it was going on in the same house as the dog and your brothers and the cat and the chicken pot pie…..lol

@rae

I love it!

@highscribeofaetherium

We could nickname him Cud.