Ruth

@hybridlore lol

@ellette-giselle well it’s cause Leon’s being whipped and will probably die.

But I mean like we should be used to that by now. Julian helping Rosalind is novel and thus should get attention.

@keilah-h

I’ve tried. I think she enjoys tormenting us 😂

@hybridlore

Yeah. A friend told me to split it or else he’ll wait to read it when he’s in solitary confinement. 😂

@keilah-h

Yeah! I’m glad you mentioned Julian. Most of the focus seems to be on Leon. I wonder why………… 🤔🤣

Do you think I’m really gonna tell you that?

@ellette-giselle wow! What a section. Between Julian’s encounter and Leon’s torture, this was a lot.

Is Leon gonna die or will his life be spared? (even if only for a little while longer)

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in our minds would be a big thing you…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry it took me so long to get to this!!!
I like it a lot!!!! <3 keep it up!!!!

@ellette-giselle
Ohhhh, okay. Wow, that is a longgg book. XD

Hmmm. I have too many WIPs

Welp, if I ended up in Areth Realms, I’d have about a 50% chance of survival depending on which people group I ended up with (Vere=dead. Alven= probably survive if made it beyond the first 10 minutes. Gnomes= I’d be fine. Randir= probably survive? They won’t hurt a woman)

If Cleft of the Cosmos, I’d be okay if I could…[Read more]

@stephie that first one lol

literally me

I have dozens of stories but only like three are properly finished….

@hybridlore

I don’t know. You see, because I split Leon and Julian’s story, this book got to 1200+ book pages, so I’m going to cut it in half, but it’s still one full book on the Word Document. I think we only have about 100 Word Doc pages left before the place I planned to split the book, but I could be mistaken.

@loopylin

I love those! 🤣

@ellette-giselle

Oh, okay. Out of how many pages total?

And are these Word/Docs pages, or like actual book pages?

@hybridlore

Hmm, I’m not sure.

I think we have close to 100 pages left.

@ellette-giselle

Augghhhhh.

Wow, this book felt way shorter than the second one. Is that the case, or was it just me?

@hybridlore

Please tell me you’re not really going to kill him off.

*goes back and rereads section*

He felt himself shaking and he tried to twist away from the source of the blows but couldn’t. As darkness closed in, the pain began to lesson until all he could feel was fire burning through him.

The overseer struck again and again and aga…[Read more]

Out of curiosity, how far are we through the book by now?

@ellette-giselle

Please tell me you’re not really going to kill him off.

Also, if Albee is the one to tell him, then we don’t get to see what happens. 🙁

@theshadow

Really know your characters and try to build conflict between them naturally. (There’s probably lots of articles about that, maybe some even on here.) The better you know and understand your characters, the easier writing will feel, especially if you don’t have a super clear plot and are more just following the events of a certain time…[Read more]

@hybridlore

But Albee has…..