PrincesaChronicle22

@esther-c

Oooo I really like that scene! =D
However I don’t have any feedback/suggestions for you right now, sorry.

@princesachronicle22

AH I MUST READ MORE XD
What creature is Anwyn?
sorry I don’t have feedback/suggestions for you either

@princesachronicle22

Yeah, I’ve considered a few options like that, but my main problem is, that this has already happened in the book. Simply a side characters view point of the scenario. She is assumed to be in leauge with the villains, but this is how I’m showing that she wasn’t at all.

So it was hard for me to state it as a full flash…

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@princesachronicle22

That was really cool to read! Are you going to post more? I’m curious to see what the rock thing is. Also, Anwyn giving everyone nicknames was hilarious.

@princesachronicle22

Wow!!!! That’s SOOO good girl!! I love the detail and how clear it is. 😍😍😍😍

I have that problem too, like smoothly transitioning scenes, especially for memories and flashbacks.

Hmm…well, you could connect the next scene with maybe Anwyn like wincing at the memory, or some kind of reaction.

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@princesachronicle22 that was great, though I’m not entirely sure how to help you… XD

Poor Anwyn 😭

I will say one thing…I was definitely confused with the whole Rock and light thing (like I know we’re supposed to be confused but I mean I couldn’t exactly “see” what was happening if that makes sense 😊) so yea

@princesachronicle22

The first part was good! I don’t really read stuff that goes into that much detail about peoples torment XD So I stopped reading, but I’m sure it was great. Love your writing style btw!

@princesachronicle22

Thanks!!

@princesachronicle22 AWW SERIN 😭 honestly she makes me think of Paxton except because of the abuse he went through he became scared, shy, etc. Serin has become tough, cold, etc.

But Pax has been thru a lot too. He actually broke an arm once because…well…

Yea…

He was blamed for it though… “clumsiness”

@princesachronicle22

Ah! Serin! No! Her father seems terrible. 😡 You should add him to the castle so I can have one of my charries beat him up.

@princesachronicle22 AWWW JUST READ IT I LUV HIM SO MUCH!!! @thearcaneaxiom I’d love to have Corvina join that group btw!

@princesachronicle22 OH I must’ve missed it sorry!!!

@princesachronicle22 heeeey u wouldn’t wanna RP as Zyrin sometime would ya? up to u 😊

@freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6 @loopylin

Arabella

Ara gazed at the crowd, slowly lowering her arm that was stretched over Asher. Suddenly, a very small girl pushed her way through the crowd.

“Hello! I’m Eddie. It’s nice to meet you. You have a reall…[Read more]

@lightoverdarkness6

Aww thank you SO MUCH!!! Yeah it was nervewracking writing it…lol. Ah good! I’m so glad you liked it!! 🙂 ❤️❤️

Lol

Of course!!! <3

@lightoverdarkness6 @godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @princesachronicle22 @gwyndalf-the-wise @whalekeeper @loopylin @anyone-else-who-cares-to-critique

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@esther-c

Girl…

That scene…

Was…

AMAZING!!!! 🤩

I really enjoyed reading it and it kept me on the edge of my seat! Can’t wait to see what happens next!!! 😃✨

Aww thank you SO MUCH!!! Yeah it was nervewracking writing it…lol. Ah good! I’m so glad you liked it!! 🙂 ❤️❤️

@princesachronicle22

AHHH!!!! Dylan, Asher!!! That was so good girl!!!

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@princesachronicle22 Ok! I just don’t really have anything for my character to do yet. When i’m out of ideas I usually just wait for someone to say something and then make my charrie reply.

@princesachronicle22 @mineralizedwritings Either of you going to RP yet? (Unless you already have and I didn’t see it) I’m waiting until one of you has a turn.

Okay, here’s the next part! And it kinda ends abruptly, because that’s all I’ve written so far. Enjoy! And, well…you’ll be in suspense for that last part, Lol 😀 XD

And if you haven’t seen the first part yet, it’s back on page 6 of this forum 😉

@freedomwriter76 @mineralizedwritings @godlyfantasy12 @princesachronicle22 @thearcaneaxiom @felicity…[Read more]