PrincesaChronicle22

@rae

Sorry this is late and I understand if I still can’t enter it, but here’s my Tenz drawing (sorry I made him winking, eyes are not my strong suit):

@linus-smallprint

So I… kind of forgot you tagged me. I’m sorry, that’s my bad. I would be willing to follow your story still if you wouldn’t mind.

@savannah_grace2009

Let me think….yEs PlEaSe HeLp Me 😭😭😭

If you’re busy though, that’s fine no worries!

Fair enough, lol! I can help a little. So are you thinking about Andromedan language names, or English titles, or both?

@hybridlore

Thank you soooo much!!! <3

@rae

Thanks for the heads up. My drawing is like 90% done, I just have a few things to finish so I probably won’t be able to submit it before the time. Is there any way that the judging time could be pushed back a bit? If not, it’s fine and I totally understand.

@ellette-giselle

It looks so good!!!! I LOVE IT, THANK YOU!!!!

@anyone-who-wishes-to-read

Chapter 7

Rage

Pain.

A distant, ever present throbbing at the base of Lilitu’s neck.

On your feet, he warned himself, or you’re dead. He put his weight on his bad foot and screamed in agony before he could stifle it.

Blue blood oozed from his numerous cuts, the edges searing like fire.

Lilitu scrambled back to…[Read more]

@jonas

you want an em dash instead of a hyphen

Noted. Thank you!!!

Maybe this will be explained at some point, but it isn’t clear why the Paynes being moved to this new district would mean she doesn’t see them anymore, did they just move to completely different areas?

She doesn’t see them anymore because both she and them are always working, the…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Let me think….yEs PlEaSe HeLp Me 😭😭😭

If you’re busy though, that’s fine no worries!

@rae

Sef

“You’re like my mom.”

She caught Chase staring, and giggled.

“Is that a good thing or a bad thing?”

She stroked the bird with her finger again.

@calyhuge

Sounds great XD I’m kinda excited!!!

@rae

Omc I’m so sorry…give me a second…I forgot AND I’ve been on a break for four days :/

@rae

OH.

MY.

GOODNESS!!! 💖🤩🥹😭

They are SO FREAKING ADORABLE!!! Oh my goshhhhhhh. And someone drew MY characters while they were bored??🥹🥹

Oh my goodness

Thank youuuuuuuu💖💖💖

You just made my day 🥰🥰🥰

I think there’s a bit of over explaining going on with the world building (telling not showing), though it’s not as much as I typically see in early drafts.

@linus-smallprint

I’m on chapter three and really enjoying the world building and the characters so far. Congrats on holding my short attention span with your story for this long 😅

I plan on reading the rest tonight :]

“Do you speak Taco Bell?” -a random guy at work

@ellette-giselle

I like Aaron so far, I think his temper adds more depth to him. The other characters are fine, I haven’t gotten to know them as much yet.

@ellette-giselle

Just to match, can you do b&w? Thanks.

@ellette-giselle

Just finished reading this section, and I do have two things to say about it. First, I think you used “questioning look” twice. Second, the cleaning scene was a little long. I think you could shorten it, I understand the purpose of it but it did feel long. Overall, though, this section was good.

@ellette-giselle

Your welcome, and thank you!