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@whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009
XD I’m glad I’m actually making some sense

@whaley

I can understand why it’s tempting to write a character getting their way though.

Maybe it’s because we relate to our own characters so much? And we like getting what we want.

But that’s also how God judges people.
“Your will be done.”

But idk I haven’t t…[Read more]

@rae
Just to clarify, I think that Chase having that flaw makes him a good and realistic character. I’m not critiquing his flaw, I’m critiquing that it’s being shown as a virtue.

Okay but actually….any of you guys that have read my book…

is it too dark??

I’m being legit…cuz now I’m scared…

not to take the focus off Whaley but all these concerns about stories being dark has got me paranoid

@whalekeeper @loopylin

Girl are you psychic or something? Because I couldn’t figure out exactly how I felt about Chase’s sacrifice until you just voiced it.

Exactly!!!! XD XD

@rae

Okay…after reading it again and reading the other’s comments…

I completely agree with @whaley and @loopy.

Chase has always kind of bothered me for the exact reason that Loopy said, but I couldn’t put it into words until I saw her post.

It doesn’t ever seem like he’s being “kind” because all it is is him beating himself up and feeling…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 Yayy :]

Why do I always either not respond to these things, or respond with 3+ giant paragraphs?? There’s pretty much no in between XD

@theducktator 8 or 9

@rae

Ok, first off, I love Jenny and also how you made the unicorn have cloven hooves.

I do have some critiques, though. Sorry if they aren’t helpful.

I don’t think giving your characters what they want is a good idea, unless you’re writing a tragedy. If I gave Ellie the safety that she wanted, she would isolate herse…[Read more]

@loopylin

I’m listening to it now XD XD

@theshadow

hey, I know you read the first couple chapters! I’d love to hear your thoughts/critiques on the recent chapters if you have any! But if you’re busy I totally get it, summer can be soooo hectic!

Instead of digging through all these posts, you can use this link to view the whole novel (what I’ve revised so…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Do you have any other thoughts on the chapters you’ve read?

@theducktator

I think that would make more sense, so probably.

I found a dumb song that made me giggle called I Am Steve by Hey Steve

Been listening to it on repeat XD

Chapter 12

A Law

The sight that greeted Lilitu was like a cold slap in the face.

In front of the church stood three Pythonos, each with a dark horse by their side.

Jraldath, Selena, and Rrath.

A chill went down Lilitu’s spine. Unfortunately, the trio’s reputation preceded them—and it was covered with the blood of innocent victims.

The bells…[Read more]

@theducktator

Why do you always have the BEST memes?!?! Those are great XD

@whalekeeper

Girlll for a second I was scared you were gonna talk about my story and I was scared XD

yeah that’s hard.

I would just encourage her to talk to her parents about it. Maybe just gently talk to her about your concerns? She might (and will probably) get defensive, but still it’s worth a shot if you care about her that much.

I’m not…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah I’ll think about doing something like that.

Again, sorry if that scene made you uncomfortable (or anyone else!)! <3

And thanks for reading my stuff!

@rae

Aww, I loved it!!

The only thing I’d recommend is to really deepen Chase’s pov, especially after he gives up his sight. Because it still felt like he could see with the way things were described. I think if you describe it in the way in which Chase was experiencing it, then it will have a much bigger impact.

Other than that it was good! (: