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@ellette-giselle

That makes sense. I bet you’re really good at writing villains lol

Despite acting like he has a death wish, though, Dante doesn’t actually want to make Alpha any more angry than he is now. He doesn’t hate Alpha at all or want to hurt him. He took the knife because he was scared, and would have tried to defend himself if Alpha…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@grcr

LOL I love these parts. 💛💛

Aww, thanks! 🥰 Me too 🤪

Would you want to write this differently… ? before I saw the “she drew out her name” part, my mind read it that she spelled it out. (Maybe I’m just crazy…?)

I don’t knowww 😭 I’ve seen it written like that in books before, but I feel like if I changed it to italics it would carry a differe…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle Do you really kill off that many characters? XD

I would’ve gone for the photo. Nothing like a good photo to hold hostage. 😉

I guess my brain just doesn’t work like that. How could that be helpful?

Bro, I was literally like smashing the submit button and it took forever for that response to post 🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@savannah_grace2009

My story is not a lighthearted, hopeful story, at least in the beginning. Right now it’s supposed to be “depressing” and dark. Honestly, to add sprinkles of hope in wouldn’t work for what’s going to happen in the next few chapters. Because right now, none of my characters know God, and so without God there is no hope. I want to…

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@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@rae

a picture from a couple years back of him and Nar having a flour fight (he lost)

Aww cute <3

Hopefully Dante isn’t too upset.

Hehe, no, upset isn’t quite the right word. My boy’s got issues.

Dante

Dante slumped to the ground, holding his throat and coughing. He sat there a while in the dimly lit hall, shoulders shaking as he tried to reg…[Read more]

@whalekeeper Hey, I noticed a thing. Did you change Seb’s last name?

My favorite type of magic is finding something that’s already true of the world and making it literal

@whalekeeper Thanks <3

I like messing with the idea of a world where almost everything you interact with is alive and has its own character. It’s fun.

@rae

… May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?

@theducktator

Liko 

Liko gratefully took the two cookies, feeling very spoiled. He had already been offered sweets by two different students, and he hadn’t even eaten breakfast yet. He thanked her again and then answered her question.

“I think it’s nice here. I like my coworkers. Bit unpredictable though. Lots of different people from lots of…[Read more]

Oh and I guess I need to throw some too.

@rae @hybridlore @freed_and_redeemed @hypridlore @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon

Throwing 3 snowballs at each of you