Mallory O'Bier

Brutally honest post

A four. It’s sprawling and epic and boring. It seems like you want to tackle too many things at once. I wouldn’t worry about weirdness. But if you (personally) believe the story is as you described above, then I think it’ll be too big to handle. You can still keep (probably) all those elements, but if you think that’s what…[Read more]

Only if you make it cliche. Cliche means it’s overdone. It’s something the audience has seen before. It’s predictable. So, sure, go ahead and start with a “cliche” premise. But as the story progresses make it unpredictable. Then those surprising moments will be what the audience will remember. Not your “cliche: premise.

@warrioroftherealm no character is ever cliche if they are approached as a person with a logical reason for being who and where they are in life. It sounds like this woman has a very good reason for being ‘strong’.

At the same time, I think ‘strong woman’ is frequently misunderstood or misinterpreted. A strong woman is not a masculine woman. A…[Read more]

@radically-surrendered WOOT YES, I’m Aussie. *waves enthusiastically*

@kballen Hi! Are you joining me? 😀
I’m working on my WIP, on a very slow and very annoying sequence on scenes. It’ll pick up eventually, but these humps are…hard to get over. 😛

@salome01w4g @jessi-rae @epicaddie2 @anyoneelse I’m on.

@radically-surrendered As of right now, it’s 2pm. Is it Tuesday for you? 😀

@radically-surrendered Oh, very interesting! 😀 Video games are great to get ideas from, especially if they have a bit of a story that you could be inspired from and develop further. 🙂

A random question, but I like to know these things: What’s the time there? 😉

@seekjustice Did I hear my name? 😛

@radically-surrendered Welcome to Kingdom Pen! 😀 Your books sounds so interesting!

Anyways her parents were cast into exile on an island where the Kingdom sends all its criminals, ‘undesirables’, and rebels, and she was born there, but longs to see the outside world, for freedom.

This part reminds me of the…[Read more]

@Dragon-snapper Farewell! Thanks for writing! 😀

@jane-maree *grabs pizza on the way out and munches on it happily*

@seekjustice @jane-maree @salome01w4g We were a lively bunch tonight. 😛 I wrote 339 (ew) and finished editing 1/3 of a chapter! Adios amigos!

@Dragon-Snapper I most certainly do! *hands you some*
(and sorry, I got called away to help my dad with something and didn’t have time to mention that I temporarily disappeared. >.<)

Hey people! A good song for writing (in my opinion) is Time by Hans Zimmer –from Inception, an awesome movie (also in my opinion). It starts out very quiet, but it builds! And power!

@jane-maree Just curious…you wouldn’t happen to have some pizza would you? 😀

@Dragon-Snapper @salome01w4g Welcome, welcome, and hello. *waves*

@salome01w4g @seekjustice @jane-maree I’m here! Write/edit time!

@SeekJustice I’m here to join you!! I have two chapters to critique/edit.