Lillian Parks

YYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!

*very seriously* This makes Dragon Snapper very pleased.
😛

@daeus Here, I’ll help you pick those up. *gobbles them all up*
@bluejay I’m not feeling so good now…
@emma-l Heh, so maybe the dragon has a bit of a sweet tooth. But hey, it’s Christmas, and I fly a lot so, I don’t mind. 😛 Anyway, Welcome to the most amazingiziest place on the internets! Just though I’d warn you, *glances around* *whispers*…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy Yep! I’m exceedingly happy! I will not melt the chairs!
I wrote 732 words!!! YAYAYAYAYAY! I did not feel writer’s blocky.
How’d you do?

@kate-flournoy Yep! I’m exceedingly happy! I will not melt the chairs!
I wrote 732 words!!! YAYAYAYAYAY! I did not feel writer’s blocky.

@kate-flournoy Yep, still here. My muse though it might come back for this one. New ideas almost always work.

@kate-flournoy @daeus I’ll be writing/planning.

@daeus Go to recent forum topics. There are two topics of this.

Ahh! How’d I make two of those? @daeus Are you able to delete the other one? 😛 Oops.

Ahh! How’d I make two of those? @daeus Are you able to delete the other one. 😛 Oops.

@daeus one last suggestion about the final sentence.

he is forced to confront everything he fights for shattered, everything he cherishes put to the test, and a long-hidden truth that will threaten his life.

I think that there should be a ‘being’ between ‘for’ and ‘shattered’. There needs to be some sort of verb there.

@daeus One quick note, where you say’ discovering a historic treasure, Matthew returns…”
You spelled Matthew with one ‘t’.

@daeus I really like this third version, but I still have a few battle-moves I like to use. 😛

First off, you say ‘vague shadows surrounding’. Well, my mind inserts the word ‘shrouds’ instead. I don’t know. I just think that word works better there.

Secondly, you say ‘wreak his vengeance’, it just doesn’t seem to fit. I start thinking ‘wreak…[Read more]

@perfectfifths
There are some very cool and well-done battles scenes in the prequels, but Anakin was very annoying.

@perfect-fifths Moody teenager indeed.
There are some very cool and well-done battles scenes in the prequels, but Anakin was very annoying.

@daeus
*melts synopsis* ATTACK!!! 😛 😀
Okay, just kidding.
So, for me, I wasn’t able to connect this:

Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook.

To this:

His wealth and power make his success almost certain

I guess for me, I don’t really know anything about Edwin Brooke…[Read more]

@daeus
*melts synopsis* ATTACK!!! 😛 😀
Okay, just kidding.
So, for me, I wasn’t able to connect this:

Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook.

To this:

His wealth and power make his success almost certain

I guess for me, I don’t really know anything about Edwin Brooke…[Read more]

@daeus
*melts synopsis* ATTACK!!! 😛 😀
Okay, just kidding.
So, for me, I wasn’t able to connect this:

Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook.

To this:

His wealth and power make his success almost certain

I guess for me, I don’t really know anything about Edwin Brooke as a…

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