Natalie C.

@ellette-giselle yikes! that’s messed up. Although I’m glad the rest of your team realized it was wrong.

Don’t graduate our MEDICAL STUDENTS with horrible grades. That’s just unwise.

actually saw a thing about that, where a girl and her parents actually sued the school she went to for graduating her with a high score when she can barely rea…[Read more]

@theshadow great job!! Can’t wait for more!

@ellette-giselle I agree with @hybridlore ‘s statements! I think that bit about Leon’s reaction might’ve been what I felt was missing from the scene.

so yeah, you can keep it, but only if it works with the story.

@ellette-giselle If it works better for your story to chuck it, then do that, but save the concept for later cause I found it really interesting, and I’m sure others would too.

@theshadow nah, it’s fine.

Actually I am currently doing one! I’ll post it when I’m finished. Usually those drawings take several hours spread over a couple of days to do, since I’m shading them now as well as just coloring them.

@whalekeeper lolll the horse meme got a good laugh out of my brother

@ellette-giselle Weirdly enough, I actually kinda liked Julian’s POV. It was interesting to see someone who was technically monotheistic, but it wasn’t the true God, and how Julian reacted to that. I feel like even if you chuck the story for now, you should save the concept for either later in the book or a different one.

@whalekeeper nope, I’m not a board games/roleplay games person. My friend and I did a warrior cats tabletop game once, but it didn’t last long. I only play roleplay games (mostly warrior cats or dragon-themed) on computer now.

@liberty lol

@liberty that must be weird.

imagine showing your dad that picture and saying “My online friend made a bad guy who has your name.”

Don’t do that lol

@linus-smallprint I’m a girl and I agree with you on that lol

@ellette-giselle makes sense. I still feel like something’s not right, but maybe I’m just looking for little tells you’ve put in your other stories when the main characters get captured/executed that aren’t there in this one, and that’s throwing me off.

@ellette-giselle

I’m not sure if this is what it is, but you said the Empire doesn’t take its own people to be slaves, yet there are two Imperials in the “care” (read as “horrific torture” lol) of a slave trader (that might not even be Imperial?) I feel like more people would ask questions, or at least be curious. The soldier that’s bribed into…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle yep!

Reading through it again, I realized most of my “improvements” were already there and I missed them, but there’s still something I can’t put my finger on that doesn’t make sense.

@ellette-giselle honestly hybridlore’s got a point. It happened as a result of their faith, yes, but it’s been long enough in the story that readers might not be paying attention to that. Also, no one’s brought up why they were captured. I’ll get into that more once I’m finished with math work so hold on a sec. I’m not against what’s about to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle ikr??

@ellette-giselle

Oh don’t worry. Things will be bad.

It’s crazy how this kind of sentence excites us.

Writers are nuts.

@theshadow thanks!

currently debating whether I should do some of my other ones today.