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Ottoline

She took a deep breath and closed her eyes to clear her thoughts. Reaching for her best arrow, she drew it back, sighting down the shaft at the bull’s eye. She felt the others’ eyes on her, but she could only concentrate on her task at hand. And then she let go. The arrow sped through the air…and landed in the target. It wasn’t in the…[Read more]

Oki doki!

Like who can hit the target with the most accuracy

@jonas

They could have a “duel” of sorts to prove who is better…

@jonas

Do you want to start or shall I? (I don’t really have any ideas…so if you do go ahead)

@jonas

Well i think where we left off, Ottoline was terrified of Ellis (as usual) and she was setting up targets to practice, and Ellis and Snake were talking about what weapons they can use.

@esther-c

That’s so cool! That would be fun!

@highscribeofaetherium

Lol your new profile pic is so confusing. I keep thinking you’re GRCR 😂

Same!!! I thought I was the only one, lol

@fernweh_grace

Of course!

@jonas

okay, sounds good.

@esther-c

Woah, I will check that out!

@jonas

I feel like I just went…XD Rae went too…so I think its either you or HighScribe’s turn. Unless you really don’t want to, lol

@esther-c

I’m glad I was able to help!

@freedomwriter76

What a sad board…. 🥺

@esther-c

Ok! If you do wanna read the chapter, I posted it like two posts above this one.

Ooo, great!! I read it just now, and I don’t think it’s information-dumping at all!

Oh yeah, ok. That’s true. Sometimes I feel like there’s a lot of writers saying to have some kind of action in the first chapter, and others saying that you just need to sho…

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@fernweh_grace

I happened to stumble upon this by chance….and I’m glad I did! Your writing is beautiful! It’s so sad….but beautiful! (you should publish this…)

@esther-c

I read the chapter, and I think I see what you mean.

I wouldn’t say that your problem is the lack of action. I think the way you opened with the painting scene is a great introduction. It introduces Ami’s character, how she’s artistic, what she values, what kind of person she is. So it definitely doesn’t need more action. The way you…[Read more]

@esther-c

I don’t want to make a whole other topic for this, so I’m posting my question(s) here. XD

lol XD

It is hard to say much without knowing much of your book, but I do agree with what Sara said as far as openings…

I guess it depends on the reader, but personally, I like books that paint some of the picture in the first (and even seco…[Read more]

Just kidding, I’ll start at :55. I have to get pumpkin pie first, lol.