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@ellette-giselle

For some reason I thought of you IMMEDIATELY (probably because we’ve had so many conversations about slapping your writing on paper and NEVER GOING BACK (something that I struggle to not do since I’m a perfectionist lol))

It’s okay!!! I completely understand and I can’t even imagine how hard the past few weeks have been for…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you want some ideas or need a brainstorming partner just lmk!

I will!!! TYSM!!! 🙃

Yes I totally get it!! You definitely don’t have to go through and try to fix everything in the first draft 🥴

ahhhh hahaha yeah, I’d definitely get in trouble with @ellette-giselle if I did that…. (jk jk h…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

Glad I was able to help!!!!!

I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]

@stephie

I feel like it totally depends on the situation.

Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

I love that idea! I’m interested.

@theducktator

One of my characters owns a pizza shop, Duck and Fred’s, and I made the Duck’s Special once. It made me so happy.

Awh cool! that’s so fun!! 🤩💛

@elishavet-elroi

Voice-claims! Yes! I got so happy when Sight and Sound’s David came out and the lead actor sounded like one of my characters.

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Research definitely counts as a hobby. And the food is so important. Have you cooked several of your traditional dishes?

Heh heh, not yet 😅 I’m still learning a lot of basics so it’ll probably be a while…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

I only have a few hobbies tbh, but I don’t know how many of them bleed into writing. I do know a lot of the things I do revolve around my characters and their world. To be honest, I feel like writing bleeds into my other hobbies more than others do to it, especially considering my writing is the base for the future animations I plan to make.

I…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@esther-c

I don’t knowww 😭 I’ve seen it written like that in books before, but I feel like if I changed it to italics it would carry a different sound… Idk, what do you think? I was unsure on this too, lol

Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth conso…[Read more]

@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@esther-c

“I am, I’m just trying to be mature about it.” He gave her a playful wink and squeezed her hand.

Maybe if she studied his face long enough she’d find something to not like.

“Says the kid who gave every girl in his fourth grade class a valentine.”

LOL I love these parts. 💛💛

Also I have two questions… don’t listen to me if you don’t…[Read more]