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@elette-giselle
Okay…so I’m going to attempt to give my thoughts.
Just so you know…I haven’t been writing for THAT long…so take everything with a grain of salt…
I just feel bad giving feedback for some reason xD

First…your revisions did help a lot (I read both the first draft and second rewrite).
But the new opening scene felt a…[Read more]

Is it just me or did KP glitch out???? Like everything looks SUPER WEIRD

@ellette-giselle

I haven’t come across anything with Leon, Riker, sand Hans that people died in. am I missing something?

Leon, Riker, and Hans are Freedom’s characters from her novels. She posts really, really, really sad scenes from her books in the forums (usually The Chat Chat) that make @rae cry…(actually they make a lot of us cry :/)

YES T…[Read more]

@rae

Chase is so adorable <3

I am officially a member of the Chase protection squad.

Sef

She laughed. “Thank you,” she said to the bird, lightly stroking it with her finger.

@rae

Sef

“We don’t have to talk about it anymore right now,” she said, sensing he was overwhelmed. “But if you ever want to talk about any of that stuff, I’m here.”

@elette-giselle @freed_and_redeemed

post scenes and break hearts. That’s what I do. And I do it very well, if I do say so myself😝

Yes.

You do.

💔😢

@rae

Sef

Please give me the words, she sent a silent prayer up to the heavens.

“His son chose to die for us. He didn’t have to…but He wanted to!” her eyes shone. “But he didn’t stay dead! After three days, He rose again!” She thought about Chase’s other question. “My father abandoned me and my mani when I was four. I had the same ques…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Oh wow, your camp sounds so much fun! And wayyy different from ours lol!

Ours is kind of in the middle of nowhere…you’d never expect a camp to be there!

It depends on who is directing the camp that week what kind of teams we have,  but normally we are split up into about four to six teams of different colors. Each team has about…[Read more]

@rae

Sef

“The Great One is what my people call “God”, or “Yahweh”. He created everything,” Sef began. “He created us, and the universe! But then a great darkness overcame the world, and the people living in it. To save us from ourselves, the Great One sent His Son to die in our place! He wants to have a relationship with us, even though we make…[Read more]

@esther-c

Livia

She wiped her eyes, determined to not let another tear fall.

“I haven’t prayed in a while,” she smiled bitterly. She shook her head. “I’m not even sure He hears me anymore. I just feel so…lost.”

@ellette-giselle

This is interesting so far! I love the idea of a historical fiction set in those earlier years! I also like your whole colosseum scene.

The main things I’m looking for at the moment would be is it intriguing, have I got a good first chapter hook. Are the characters defined, are you interested in them yet. etc. Basically all the t…

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@esther-c

Yes yes yes!!!!!!!

lol that’s so funny though!

Livia

She closed her eyes as he wrapped his arms around her.

But she felt numb.

All she felt was hurt…so much hurt…

“We had to sell Xandro,” all her attempts to keep from crying failed, and she let out a sob. “We had to sell everything and move to the poor district,” she leaned…[Read more]

@rae

Sef

“You don’t have to be strong enough,” Sef pulled away and looked up at him. “Because you never will be strong enough on your own. But when you ask the Great One for help, when you are weak, He is stronger!”

@ellette-giselle

So wait, I could submit a book I’m working on in one of the Forums and y’all would give me feedback!

Yes! 😊😊

I am always looking for honest critiques and it’s hard to find someone that will do it because they are all afraid of hurting my feelings. Even though I tell them that it’s not hurting but helping. I think it’s just a th…

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@trailblazer

And I’ve noticed the days that I miss it are the days that usually end up with things not going well or I’m in a bad mental state or something.

Me too!!!

@trailblazer

And sometimes when you’re used to hearing Him speak a certain way, God switches it up to get us out of our boxes and teach us how to expand our awareness of Him.

Exactly!!

Our culture also tells us to follow our hearts, but it’s not healthy, because emotions are so up and down- they aren’t stable. I heard a pastor say this once: “Emot…

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@ellette-giselle

Aww thank you!!!

If you want to officially submit a story to KP, like I did on the website, you don’t even have to be a member or create an account to do that. So yes, you can submit one at any time!

If you want to just post a story for fun or critiques by anyone on KP, you don’t have to have a rank either…just make a new…[Read more]

@rae

Two weeks sounds good to me! I think that’s about the same amount of time as the first challenge.

Tenz sounds cute and cool—I’m excited to draw him!