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All right @That_Writer_Girl_99 read through the document, and left a comment in one place, but otherwise you did good. 😀 You’re handling Matthias with more subtlety. *thumbs up*

Have you figured out your plot problems? Any way I can help you?

@BethanySinkyRoses welcome aboard, new KeePer! 😀 Look forward to seeing you around.

(@aratrea I hope you know that profile picture makes you impossible to take seriously. XD)

@That_Writer_Girl_99 no, you’re doing and have done great. Just last I checked you were having problems with the plot, and that’s the one thing that really hangs me up when I struggle with that.
*cough* I suppose you can ignore that bit of advice then. 😉

@That_Writer_Girl_99 quick tip: look at your different character motivations. Each character is the hero of his or her own story. What are they aiming for? What is it they want? Kara’s not going to be the only one moving the plot. Each person’s life is an entire story. You chose to tell those stories through Kara’s eyes, but they’re still separate…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 I promise I haven’t forgotten you. I’m really busy right now so I will get to this as soon as possible, but it may be a bit. 😉

@That_Writer-Girl_99 I promise I haven’t forgotten you. I’m really busy right now so I will get to this as soon as possible, but it may be a bit. 😉

@Winter-Rose poor guy… *hugs him* Seriously though, you did great. First person pov is not one of my strong points and can be very easy to do typically, but you did great with it. Thanks for sharing. 😀

@Daeus yep. 590 words, so I’m pretty happy. 🙂 Thanks yourself.

@Daeus writing now. I’ll be going until two o clock.

@Daeus about to be. I’ll tag you when I start.

*screams*
@Ethryndal aaauuuuggghhhh!!! I’m dying! *chokes on her laughter and topples over off her chair and goes into spasms on the floor*

PERFECT. Absolutely perfect.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 could you give me the link to the doc again? Mine is doing weird things.

That sounds like a great solution. Good job. I notice you’re thinking in wider perspectives now— purposefully using the interactions to develop or manipulate. *wiggles eyebrows* Excellent work, my young padawan. 😉

@That_Writer_Girl_99

@Daeus it just doesn’t like me. 😀

Okay @Daeus my post does not appear to be showing up. My guess is it got spammed.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 wow, that took an unexpected turn. 😛 I love it. Good job with the prose. 😉
You’re right though, the shift in Matthias is pretty obvious.
And… that might actually be a problem. It’s perfectly fine for him to change his personality as you write him; that’s not what I’m worried about. It’s that the Matthias we meet first and…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 wow, that took an unexpected turn. 😛 I love it. Good job with the prose. 😉
You’re right though, the shift in Matthias is pretty obvious.
And… that might actually be a problem. It’s perfectly fine for him to change his personality as you write him; that’s not what I’m worried about. It’s that the Matthias we meet first and…[Read more]

@That-Writer_Girl_99 wow, that took an unexpected turn. 😛 I love it. Good job with the prose. 😉
You’re right though, the shift in Matthias is pretty obvious.
And… that might actually be a problem. It’s perfectly fine for him to change his personality as you write him; that’s not what I’m worried about. It’s that the Matthias we meet first and…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 well I’m here now. XD *folds hands primly**ahem* You had a question?

*shakes head* You guys… XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 YAY!!! *tackles you and smothers you in blankets and pillows* We knew you could do it! Way to go! *fuscia confetti*