@markmcguire
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Rogue One in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@His-Instrument well @Ethryndal and I discovered recently that I’m Luthien Tinuviel and I have dark hair but I’m not from Rivendell. 😀 The Girdle of Mellian, I think… 😉
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 that is a GREAT midpoint. So right now what you’re looking for seems to be a first plot point— where Kara commits to action. What about Blake? Was he taken in the fight with the Catastrophes? Or did he use it as a distraction to infiltrate the prison and get caught or something? If that’s the case Matthias could have gotten…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 perhaps you should try mapping out Kara’s arc in detail and going from there?
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Hope Ann replied to the topic The Wonderland Story in the forum Short Story Critiques 7 years, 6 months ago
@anne-of-lothlorien I really like the present tense in this. *waits for random answer*
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Greetings, fellow scribblers! in the forum Start HERE 7 years, 6 months ago
@Aratrea lol
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
All right @That_Writer_Girl_99 read through the document, and left a comment in one place, but otherwise you did good. 😀 You’re handling Matthias with more subtlety. *thumbs up*
Have you figured out your plot problems? Any way I can help you?
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Greetings, fellow scribblers! in the forum Start HERE 7 years, 6 months ago
@BethanySinkyRoses welcome aboard, new KeePer! 😀 Look forward to seeing you around.
(@aratrea I hope you know that profile picture makes you impossible to take seriously. XD)
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 no, you’re doing and have done great. Just last I checked you were having problems with the plot, and that’s the one thing that really hangs me up when I struggle with that.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 quick tip: look at your different character motivations. Each character is the hero of his or her own story. What are they aiming for? What is it they want? Kara’s not going to be the only one moving the plot. Each person’s life is an entire story. You chose to tell those stories through Kara’s eyes, but they’re still separate…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 I promise I haven’t forgotten you. I’m really busy right now so I will get to this as soon as possible, but it may be a bit. 😉
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@That_Writer-Girl_99 I promise I haven’t forgotten you. I’m really busy right now so I will get to this as soon as possible, but it may be a bit. 😉
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Hope Ann replied to the topic The Legend of King Daeus in the forum Short Story Critiques 7 years, 6 months ago
@ethryndal *chokes* That… that is hysterical. I can’t believe how much the face looks like him while also looking so… off. XD And that frog. I get the impression that ‘The Wiser’ is somewhat indulgent while his frog keeps everyone in line when he isn’t looking.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Sam I am: Doom, Glitter, and Iphones in the forum Short Story Critiques 7 years, 6 months ago
@Winter-Rose poor guy… *hugs him* Seriously though, you did great. First person pov is not one of my strong points and can be very easy to do typically, but you did great with it. Thanks for sharing. 😀
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Writer's corner #5 in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@Daeus yep. 590 words, so I’m pretty happy. 🙂 Thanks yourself.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Writer's corner #5 in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@Daeus writing now. I’ll be going until two o clock.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Writer's corner #5 in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@Daeus about to be. I’ll tag you when I start.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic The Legend of King Daeus in the forum Short Story Critiques 7 years, 6 months ago
*screams*
@Ethryndal aaauuuuggghhhh!!! I’m dying! *chokes on her laughter and topples over off her chair and goes into spasms on the floor*PERFECT. Absolutely perfect.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 could you give me the link to the doc again? Mine is doing weird things.
That sounds like a great solution. Good job. I notice you’re thinking in wider perspectives now— purposefully using the interactions to develop or manipulate. *wiggles eyebrows* Excellent work, my young padawan. 😉
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Hope Ann replied to the topic Shorty Story – Mystery in the forum Short Story Critiques 7 years, 6 months ago
Ok… so I’ve not read it yet because I’m at a creation conference. I might get to it later on. But… I wanted to share this. XD
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Hope Ann replied to the topic Writer's corner #5 in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@that_writer_girl_99 I started one to start getting a presence, so to say. I post about my works in progress, writing tips, writing humor, updates… it is fun.
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