Mark Kamibaya

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *disdainful sniff* Well you didn’t need to go and drag my personality type into things. I have always COMPLETELY been the victim here, no buts about it.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *disdainful sniff* Well you didn’t need to go and drag my personality type into things. I am COMPLETELY the victim here, no buts about it.

@Northerner This is why it’s better to just avoid on-topic responses around here. They generally never work.

Tagging @GracieGirl because you’re an adorable, enthusiastic INFP who paints cool things and taught me the difference between P/J in personality types. Girlie, you spruce things up.

And @That_Writer_Girl_99 because you’re an awful INFP who is mean to me and has the nerve to like Luke Skywalker.

(Okay, okay, fine. *grudging admittance* I really…[Read more]

Also, it’s so hilarious reading back over old threads. We were such babes.

(Even though that was like, only six months ago…)

Aaaaaaaand then there’s @Emma-Flournoy. Making the world a better place, one pancake at a time. XD

@dragon-snapper @kate-flournoy How dare you have a gif war and not invite me.

@dekreel @daughteroftheking @ariella-newheart @emma-flournoy @kate-flournoy @ethryndal

And here’s a flashback to one of the first gif war that lasted 3 pages.
https://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/taking-breaks-from-unfinished-books/page/2/ between me, Kate and Ethryndal. *nods*

Kate, why is it that you and I always have to get stuck in gif wars? 😛

Long live the gif wars!!! Guys, these things are so epic.

@Dragon-Snapper Have pancakes. They fix everything, you know. *pancakes*

@His-Instrument Aaahh, you too. Many times over. 😀

@Dragon-snapper yeah. They said it. 😛

@Dragon-Snapper I’m just gonna shove this on you because this taught me almost everything I know about choppiness.

And as far as action/dialogue tags… that’s when things get tricky. Like Daeus said, it’s a complicated dance of changing up the pattern of things. What I’ve found helps is when you take a basic action and elaborate on it. Don’t…[Read more]

@dekreel @skredder I’m signing out now. I really didn’t get that much done. Wrote about 150 words, read some articles about choppy writing, and resolved I need to read more.

@dragon-snapper I’m not really an expert on this, but the thing that’s helped me most is mixing things up — variety.

Variety in sentence length. I like to mix long, short, and medium sentences in a fairly even blend.

Variety in sentence openers. Too many subject openers in a row can get choppy. Try to throw in some -ings,…[Read more]

@dekreel Well, I was going by the military version. Gamma an Epsilon… I think those are Greek? Or some other version.

I don’t know. That’s just what I’m calling them.

@dekreel Alpha – 1st readers of unedited work.
Beta – 2nd readers of 1st edits
Charlie – 3rd readers of 2nd edits.
Delta – 4th readers of 3rd edits.
Echo – 5th readers of 4th edits.
And so forth. I don’t know if this actually exists.

@his-instrument Ah, that’s awesome. 🙂 I’m very proud of you.

@warrenluther04 Lol. *pats shoulder* There there. You’re only ah… two months late.

LOL Yes you can read it. BUT, you’ll probably have to wait a bit until I’m done with this round of edits. Then, I’ll ask for another round of beta-readers (charlie-readers). But I will need that kind of people, so I’ll be sure to tag you if you’re available…[Read more]