Mark Kamibaya

@that_writer_girl_99 I’m actually very interested to know what you found out…

@catwing First of all, go get a copy of How To Write A Sizzling Synopsis. It’s a very good book.

That said, here are a few tips to get you started. I’m working off your most recent synopsis.

1. Yes, use as few names as possible. Say “main character and his five friends” or something like that.
2. When you say these people are not normal–even…[Read more]

@seekjustice You made sense. 😉 And yes, I agree. But not knowing who the main character(s) is/are (or if they’re all main characters), I didn’t comment on it.

@catwing Yes, it is better. May I make a couple more suggestions? *does it anyway* 😉

I’d remove “you could even say they were abnormal” because it’s redundant with the previous sentence.
Good job using short sentences, but too many at once makes it too bitty – there’s a balance. 🙂
For example, the last two sentences. As written, they would read…[Read more]

@catwing I did a little editing. The first is your original, and the second is my edit version. Your version is a bit wordy and passive, with rather long sentences. Shorter sentence portrays tension and danger. Hope it helps. 🙂

You Were Called By The King
Jack, Alex, Cele, John, Chase, and Amelia are not normal. Even before they met a mysterious…[Read more]

@allison-grace We all are. 😀

I think everyone makes great points about Luke as a character. And @salome01w4g I also like Han Solo.

@catwing @jane-maree I’m signing out now. I wrote 1085 and edited almost a chapter. Byeee!!!
*and then I shall makes some collages. Yessss..*

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@catwing Ew. Please cough. Just cough. Be human just this once.

@Jane-Maree Those hidden (or else, not so hidden—but still 😛 ) meanings are fun. 😀

@That_Writer_Girl_99 I see the point. What Kate said about character dynamic-ness and duplicity is right true though.
And honestly though, I think a bunch of my dislike for Luke comes from the bad acting. That he’s really poorly acted makes him a whole lot less…good in every way as a character. Which isn’t Luke’s fault, it’s Mark Hamil’s. XD If…[Read more]

@catwing *hands you cough medicine*

@Ethryndal Um…I came up with it off the top of my head, yes, though it’s hardly a stunning simile. XD I must’ve just been favored at the moment, because usually when I try to think up an appropriate metaphor—YEAH, I know how hard it is. Ugh. 😛

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *blinks* I don’t pat your head.

@Jane-Maree COOL. Is the girl’s last name…[Read more]

@catwing Yessssssss.

@catwing I am writing a scene which launches everything exciting about this novel! Villains with character arcs! Ah ha! Ah ha!

@jane-maree Going pretty good. The writing is interesting. It’s…first draft.

@Aislinn-Mollisong I have never used Canva, but @Hope has had a very good experience with it, so yes. That could be another option.

@jane-maree HIIII!!!

@Jane-Maree I want to meet them. 😀

@daughteroftheking *bounces back and falls over as the unexpected daughteroftheking enters* Wow! Hi!
@catwing *cocks head* Chili? *nose twitches* Chili. *polite smile*