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Chapter the 40th out!

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Chapter the 39th out!

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Chapter the 38th!

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Chapter the 36th out!

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You’re welcome!

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IT”S TIME FOR FEEDBACK!

The dawn will come

Please remember this is my opinion. You do not have to take any advice I give. These are just thing that I think would be a good idea. Please let me know if you have any questions, or need clarification.

Thank you very much for allowing me to participate in this. It’s been fun reading…[Read more]

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Chapter the 35th out!

At more chapters than the last book now. But not more words so far.

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Chapter the 34th out!

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I like it! Isaiah and Cedrick are more interesting together than apart.

Glad to hear they are a good combo. Sometime what make a good character isn’t so much who he is, but who he’s with.

As for the world, your inspiration photos are close to what I pictured while I read. There was this sense of dry coldness in the described…

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@ellette-giselle

*laughing very hard* *stops* Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!

If I did that…… *shudders*

Lucky boy. I can’t believe your brain lets you do that.

Um… yes. I’m following the rule of first drafts to ignore grammar and turn off spell check. I guess I…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Commenting privileges granted

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You can’t comment? I can go fix that.

@keilah-h

I didn’t! Where’s the appendix?

Right after the story in the same document

@ellette-giselle

Hey! Scythe! My dad and brothers LOVE that game. Funny thing is, I can’t stand it, but I’m the one that got them into it by buying it for them. 😂 Weirdly enough, I was picturing this kingdom like the scythe art, so that’s super funny.

It is a neat world, and the artwork is very good (though I wouldn’t recommend looking the artis…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Isaiah really does have a wonky moral code, ngl.

I know. But that’s what makes him interesting and why I had to write this down.

I like how the perspective is that of the not-dog, whatever he is. Him getting distracted by the food was hilarious.

Did you see that note in the appendix explaining what he is?

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https://drive.proton.me/urls/23F48VDN88#loAxe5eW0Gli

This link should work for you

@ellette-giselle

Your computer:

@keilah-h

Okay. I fixed that. Thank you!

@keilah-h

I haven’t, sorry. She’s kept writing it thoguh, right? I might go back and catch up.

Thank you! She’s entirely finished book one in this series, and the full thing should be in the document.