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whaley replied to the topic short scene! in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 3 weeks, 1 day ago
Good choice.
Awesome, thank you! *Sees the cookie box is already empty* *Refills it with caramel popcorn*
It’s difficult to make this scene clear, because it is confusing from the character’s perspective. He is supposed to not know why this is happening. So… yeah. XD
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 1 day ago
@koshka @ellette-giselle and maybe? @raxforge
I’m confused, are we still in the basement or is something happening?
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whaley replied to the topic short scene! in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 3 weeks, 1 day ago
@loopylin @rae @freed_and_redeemed
Awesome, thank you all <3
Barnes “disappeared” but she’s actually close by, getting something to cheer him up. Probably a bag of baseballs.
For someone that hasn’t been through that, I will be honest in saying that it took me a moment or two to kinda figure out what was going on
Good to know. Since I was just w…[Read more]
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Loopy replied to the topic short scene! in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 3 weeks, 2 days ago
A Seb scene and a cookie in one post?? You spoil me.
*nibbles on cookie while reading*
Your writing is so good. Sorry if you were looking for criticism but I can’t think of much. I’m not really sure what happened to Barnes? I’m thinking maybe Seb was stuck for a lot longer than he thought so she left at some point?
Anyway, I’ve…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic short scene! in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 3 weeks, 2 days ago
oh right, tags.
@mineralizedwritings @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @rae @honestlyidontknowwhowantstoseethis
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whaley started the topic short scene! in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 3 weeks, 2 days ago
I would love feedback on this scene!
Warning, a scene of a character getting very overwhelmed to the point of panic.
– Here it is –
The ball flew across the empty baseball field, and landed with a puff of dust.
“Wahoo!” Sebastian leaped, and pumped his fist in the air. His curls gleamed, bouncing over his dull navy jacket. “Take that, d…[Read more]
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Loopy posted an update 3 weeks, 2 days ago
@whalekeeper Hello, you’re awake. I locked myself out of both my car and my apartment so I’m sitting in the trunk of my dad’s pickup with nothing to do until my parents get home lol. Wanna chat?
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Loopy replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 2 days ago
Also random question, who’s your favorite Over The Garden Wall character? Mines either Beatrice or Wirt. (but Gregs good to!)
Hey! Another OTGW fan! Umm I can’t decide, really. I love them all. Greg is ridiculous and really funny, but I also love how geeky and socially awkward Wirt is.
My family is having an autumn party pr…[Read more]
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Loopy replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 2 days ago
Felicity
Felicity’s brain was short-circuiting. Did she really just say that? What was Lois thinking? It took her a moment to compute Maverick’s question.
“Oh, uh, Linmaus. Cool city. Bit crowded. You?”
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whaley replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 2 days ago
Looks like Percival has pride issues XD
Barnes
Reid used Rowan’s cloak to prop up the sleeping boy’s head. The group then ate in silence, the sizzle of meat singing to keep them company.
“…Now we can turn to conversation,” Barnes remarked.
Just don’t expect me to start it.
She took her own bowl of food and set it to the…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
@rae @theshadow (shadow, you can tell us to wait for you whenever you want :P)
Barnes
That was all Barnes needed. “Sit down now, or return in fifteen minutes.”
Two of the men – Percival and Rowen – still eyed each other like feral dogs. They sat without removing their blades from their waists. Reid slowly shifted his tendrils to the forefront,…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
*Eyes glued to the page* FeLoisity has been officially confirmed. Good, good.
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Loopy replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
Winnifred
“You’re the first… person we’ve seen.”
Izre did not look pleased with that answer, and Win suddenly felt guilty.
“But we could help you look! It’s a mystery. Watson and I love mysteries. If you’ll have us.”
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Loopy replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
Fel and Lo
“The sunset’s nice,” Lois said quietly, adjusting his glasses.
“I don’t think I caught your name. I’m Lois. And this is my, um,” he faltered for a second, and Felicity interrupted.
“His girlfriend. Felicity.” She held out her hand with a smile.
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Loopy replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
Sorry, I don’t rp as fast as you. Glad you found someone else for Ruth to meet!
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Loopy replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
Winnifred
Win walked closer to the wall, so she would be well out of Izre’s way.
“Oh, that’s cool. I’m Winnifred.” Her name felt insufficient after Izre’s long title, so she added, “Student of Gonzaga University. And that’s Watson, my cat.”
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Loopy replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
@raxforge I’m in a campaign run by my brother. Do you dm or you prefer just being a player?
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whaley replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
Barnes
“It’s a sport.” Barnes held up a fist, and hit it against the palm of her other hand. “Like that.”
They halted at a hall junction. Following a smaller corridor, they passed golden lanterns, the light of which seemed to melt through the cracks of the stone walls like melted butter.
The corridor opened to a chamber. A…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
I have no clue. I think the castle is meant to be mysterious in every aspect, but also customizable, so you can make up rooms. Whatever lore it contains is probably in the earlier pages of this roleplay.
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Esther replied to the topic Break the Record!!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 weeks, 4 days ago
@rae @everyone-elseee
Volleyball and school have been keeping me crazy busy, so honestly just throw out a time and I’ll try my best to be there. We’re getting into tournaments/playoffs so it’s hard to know when I’ll be free.
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Oh my goodness I didn’t see you, hiiiiiiiiii
You didn’t get kidnapped by a random stranger, did you?
Pleeze survive, i don’t want natural selection to get you
I need to sleep now, but thx for wanting to talk anyway <3
I survived, thanks for worrying XD My parents finally arrived.
Yay 😁
Good night! <3