Lydia S.

But ya callan sucks

And if she was there (she does later have a confrontation with her, Callan and November) she isn’t at that place in her character to fight back );

@loopylin sadly no XD

@loopylin awww thx!! I feel like my writing is subpar tbh….but idk sometimes posting it elsewhere helps? idk…I give myself such a hard time. I’m just writing it down, and I have to remind myself that every single second XD

@whalekeeper for me I feel like my writing isn’t like…good enough? Like it’s too childish? or…idk…not (mature isn’t the right word…) like I don’t like doing descriptions…so def description writing, but I just feel like its not great. I feel like I wrote better in the past and that thought process stinks so I try not to dwell on it…

ANYWAYYY if u want to read the scenes I’ve got…it’s November scenes… (good luck gang…don’t hate me XD)

here’s the first one! (btw I’m not looking for critiques. this is a draft and idk how the writing is honestly…im not super happy but im just getting words down.)

And its not super linear cuz Im not doing Ara’s…[Read more]

As for the other stuff, I really appreciated the themes you worked with. That we can’t love ourselves as we should through our own eyes. We have to see us (and others) through God’s love, light, hope. That isn’t easy, but it’s worth it.

I liked the order, how you spliced poem and story together. It made it easy to read and follow.

@savannah_grace2009

Wow. That sixth story was dark, but I know it’s needed.

It’s sad how many people indulge in self harm just “trying to feel”, but since it looks “normal”, like tattoos, piercings, or extreme diets, other people don’t see it for what it is.

My warning wouldn’t be that it’s dark or violent, but that you don’t want to even…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

*Cracks knuckles*

First off, that sounds awesome.

Second, Thursday? That’s a pretty tight crunch, but you can do this. Right? Right.

I’ll read through and give what thoughts I have ect. and (if you’d like) typos/errors I catch. What type of accountability do you want? I can email you daily, you can email me, whatever you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It looks like we’ll be at a church training thing this Saturday, so I probably won’t be able to join. That said, you’re welcome to send an email link, and if I happen to be free I’ll bounce on.

@raxforge @loopylin

*Splutter of laughter*

Fish person? How is Syph like a fish person, pray tell?

Syph

So he didn’t have to “get a girl”, whatever that meant. He turned to give Ellie a grateful smile before shifting narrowed eyes to the Rax Boy.

What was that supposed to mean? A good natured challenge, or a patronizing ‘let the Little…[Read more]

@raxforge

Oh gracious. XD

What kind of trouble?

@loopylin @raxforge

Syph

He had to what? He blinked at Eddie. A dark blue flush crept up his neck. Water droplets appeared and disappeared in the air around him.

“Oh. Guppies. For a dance? But I don’t know of any other spritelings to pair with. It could take an indefinite amount of time to even find someone who wouldn’t be—oh tadpoles—…[Read more]

@esther-c

The P.S. is beautiful. It closes out the letter (and story) in a satisfying, simple end. In my opinion, very good.

@loopylin @raxforge

Syph

Ball room? He’s seen something, a large sign on his way to school. But now, that had said Ball Pit. Surely they weren’t the same thing. How was one supposed to dance in a ball room?

Wildly. He could do that.

“Tonight. Oi, that is agreeable.”

Although he’s have to find this Room of Balls too. The misty whisp tightened…[Read more]

@loopylin

That sounds like an insane amount of fun. XD

My experience is just jumping around the house to Celtic music with my siblings.

@whalekeeper

Aww, thank you! *He turns bright blue and bows*

The water Sprites dance is like what you’d get if you mixed ballet and Irish folk/cog dancing, with the added effects of water swirls following their every command. They move the water, and the water moves them.

By the way, Syph has no problem dancing with girls. He just is trying to understand how it would work if you weren’t in competition.

I love historical clothing and culture, so I know know how clothing, and culture, and the rule of law change over the ages in my WIP world’s. I’m also a decentish seamstress. I may or may not have constructed my characters wardrobes in my head. Although…I don’t think I’ve really described them…so I don’t think that’s really influenced my…[Read more]